Chained In Sorrows ( A Cento - 50 lines ) by Kari at All poetry

In darkness let me dwell, the ground shall sorrow be
Come, heavy sleep, the image of true death
Mourn, mourn, look now for no more day
Neither I came on my own nor I go with my will
It seems to me that I have lived alone
Surely these muted days are one with days remembered
A slumber did my spirit seal
years of anger following

I want you to know
Here I love you
I carry your heart with me
When I love
nothing else exists

I long for you, I mourn for you
O eye, weep tears continually flowing
I wept until my tears were dry

Awake, sad heart, whom sorrow ever drowns
LIFE! I know not what thou art
I love another, and thus I hate myself

Yes! I had hope when first we met
I had a lover who betrayed me

Men do not listen
I think it better that in times like these
to think I will end
The red rose whispers of passion
I have no power to change you

I go from loving to not loving you
Yes leave me !—I can bear it now
O A new song, a free song
The further off, the more I joy

Remember me when I am gone away
We understand a lot of things we never did before

Canst thou, O cruel! say I love thee not
Into the Silent Land
There's little joy in life for me
NAY, sing no more—no more—my soul is lost

There's a grief too hard to bear
But at the end, be insolent
He bound me in an iron chain
Weeping

My soul is a broken field
feeling hunger and cold

O, Death, return! And hasten to assume
Come, come, I faint: thy heavy stay
It's boring and sad, and there's no one around
Terrible things were done
Hast thou forgotten me? O dead delight
Death, when thou shalt come to me

here is my last good-bye
'Tis finished! 'tis ended

Author notes

A contest entry

Joining lines in Oldpoetry (contest) by Mari Goes. 5500 points, ended March 19, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Invite only... by phoenixonfire. 300 points, ended March 16, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
100 th GROUP CONTEST; by Dove by Partners In Crime. 900 points, ended April 12, 2008, 126 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Immortal execution for the brain

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catz
April 5, 2008

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This is awesome, Kari. A beautiful compilation of lines from old poetry which make up a mesmerizing 'new' poem. Excellent job you did with this

Good luck in the contest

love and
Granna
FifthDove
April 2, 2008

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wow, you had to have done alot of work creating this piece. It is simply wonderful but looks way hard. I think you should get a hundred clappies on this one but it will only let me do 3. Thanks for the entry
Mari Goes
March 19, 2008
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Hi I read this again before judging, and after checking the links I noticed you have only 49 and two that lead to the same poem http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/35329-Eliza-Acton-Yes-Leave-Me

That makes 2 links too short. What did you do to them?
phoenixonfire
March 16, 2008

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This is so deep and sad! Its got a mourning feel to it...like someones thrown the heart aside and its crying somwhere..i like some phrases here that really amplifies the affect of the work!

great work!!

thanks a bunch!

pri
Mari Goes
March 12, 2008

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feeling of despair and being lost is so well showed here!
You have chosen excellent lines and made of them a great new poem. The old and modern English worked well together. Very good and what I'm sure was, a very hard work to search for the right lines.
Well done Kari
luna-midnight
March 11, 2008

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wow this is awesome, so long, but very good and worth reading it all
great write, and good luck in the contest!
take care
stephanie =)
Cerulean Sunrise
March 11, 2008

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Well Kari..
When I saw the Cento I was dismayed. That disapeared as I started reading this thing you have put together.
Though I love most originality. I see here that originally of arrangement can be a very good thing as well. Lovely!
Yemassee
March 11, 2008

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There's only 49 lines here....Just kidding, lol

Did I freak you out?

This is even better than your first one! And I like the topic, not just about love, but the frailty and failures of it. And you've managed it really well, so much so, if you'd posted this as a regular poem, nothing would seem strange about it, and that's the real tribute, congrats on an excellent cento!
Heavenly Angel
March 11, 2008

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Oh awesome cento, my friend...truly awesome!
Your talent just shines and shines!!!
This should bring a shiny to your door
Wishing you all the very best!!!! Wow!
haikumonk
March 11, 2008

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"Inspired" sums this wonderful piece up. Your muse know limits in this one. Excellent, well focused piece that moves well and carrys a strong centered voice. Nicely written.
x-Black-Butterfly-x
March 11, 2008

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you always have to out do ev dont you I love how you joined this alltogehter..i love it so uch that I am switching mine and yours around
Tattboyspet
March 11, 2008

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ROFLMAO!!!! You go girl!!!!!!!!!
This old English stuff is definitely up your alley isn't it????
wonderfully done my friend - was dressed as Juliet while reading this one