Huddled against the cold;
troubled, homeless and old.
Author notes
http://www.shutterstock.com/pic-1925279-homeless-man-lying-on-the-bench.html
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Essence
The Essence, created by Emily Romano is a short, structured form of two-lines,
six syllables each with an end rhyme and internal rhyme.
A contest entry
- The TITLE contest...show me how clever you are... by Demington.
700 points, ended March 24, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please take a look at the picture linked in my authors comments, thankyou.
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I know I already commented on this, but it deserved a third go...and I tried to put more clapping smileys down, but it wouldn't let me. Darn.
Well done, very well done.
Blessings,
C -
Yes. I really like this and came back for a second look.
I can so clearly picture this. Just wonderful! -
Such a wonderful entry! I have no critique, only thanks for entering!
Blessings,
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. . . cool!
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snap of penning fingers made me notice
I certainly looked and not just at glint of last belongingings of then
this double rhyming scheme has a caption in passing kind of match for title and image. It conveys the harshness but unsure what else to say in the rush perhaps. even if out of office picnic per se. but there is a society to not just cruise by but be of change for life...
not boringly short or poor of serious feelings as shared thoughts of my dad or ma-in-law almost,
babies are my subject -
Nice,
Good use of words, and it fits the given picture prompt perfectly.
Thanks for sharing, peace, and all the best within the contest! :)
-Timothy
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