Oh, sway me, play me, lay me
down on the silky sheets,
lets let our love run free
for at least once in this sultry night.
Oh, spin me, pin me, win me
like a relic giving its consent.
Woo me with those feather words
that flutter in your heart.
Oh, claim me, blame me, drain me
in the name of our love,
fluid tantric dance in scarlet,
passion flames drawing the night.
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I love, love, love the rhyming repetition in the first line of each stanza. I'm a little obsessed with lists and organization so the form here pleases me. The word choice is sultry and smooth flowing. My favorite line:
"Woo me with those feather words
that flutter in your heart."
Very lovely.
KW~
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Oh yes, I love forms and rhyme too, but so far have found it extremely hard to write something successful in those fields. This is why I joined the group, but this particular one is my little pride and joy. It is playful and carefree. Thank you for commenting.
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The style here is very similar to "addictive".
This puts it all in plain view of the mind's
eye without using very many words. It very
much gives off a playful and sexy mood. Blue
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