she cries out,
shes made of doubt,
shes sick of life,
she wants her knife,
this girl who gets beaten,
she's never properly eaten,
she doesn't feel pretty,
she lives in the city
people mistreat her,
earth isn't her home,
all the time she feels alone,
the world puts more burdens,
upon her weighed down shoulders,
many scars from her parents, her holders,
sometimes she causes hurt,
which makes her feel like death less alert,
her heart is heavily broken,
into tiny little pieces,
she beats herself up because of words silently unspoken,
then her tears once again increases,
holding the world on her hands,
the hearts on her shoulders,
give in to cuttings demand,
and her blood spill on dirty land.
Author notes
just something i came up with,
hope you like,
xxxx
In a list
A contest entry
- The World. by Eyes Wide Shut.
1250 points, ended March 21, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me what you think?
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perfection.
Mylee
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Well hun I would say something really nice and stuff but everyone took what I wanted to say so I have nothing that you have not heard before.. But it was a Beautifully Painful write.. Great write..
Peace to you, J.
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Wow
Now this is another incredibly penned well defined awesome poem that has it all. you have such good rhyme scheme wording & imagery built through out this poem. the way you potray yourself in this poem is incredibley deep and just down right spectactular. its a very rough subject to write about but also one you are good at doing. any ways I am really stuttering here but basuically in a nut shell this is one powerful poem. keep up the very good work and good luck
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Wow... I'm going to copy what other people have said and say this really hits home. I understand what this feels like....
amazing poem... amazing
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WOw very moving poem liked it a lot so much so I am holding a poem shortly and was wondering would you like to be in it! I'm just collecting enough points first
Your poem really touched me
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Wow,
So many battles we try and fight within the mind, and so many trials the world throws at us, demands we smile, when we wish not to, please, and thank you.. So many feel isolated in a crowded room, thoughts of what's next, thoughts of doom. I know we need others to help us through, but it's hard to find others help, when they need some to.. Maybe entwined some caring souls can help one another through. Feeling pain within, helpless, filled with guilt inside, nowhere can one hide from these lingering thoughts. Thankful I have a pen to jot my thoughts down, because there's chaos all around.
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*hugs*
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You haven't lost anything and never will. Time will heal you sooner than you think. I will be here. I promise.
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A very powerful poem hun x How often many of us have felt these emotions cut into us time and time again. But somehow we are still here and there must be reason for that x Stay true to your heart for always hun, you will always have my strength and warmth and love for you to cling to xx
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As far as I am concerned this girl just needs a hero. This is very touching
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Crazy sad.... very troubling... that poor girl... wickedly written, of course...
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this beautiful piece of art.. well done!.. i know it going to hit home with a lot of reader.. thanks for sharing
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oh this is such a sad write
kinda made me worry because the depths of it many can relate to. you know I am here for you my darkened angel
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Another beautiful piece you have here, Best of luck my M'Lady ~Bret~
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Wow, this is hitting close to home, I feel a little pathetic myself right now, heh. Thanks for entering. Good job.
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