I'm walking down
This lonely road
Couldn't drive home
My car got towed
As I turned around a corner
I saw these strange looking creatures
They just didn't seem right
Had all disturbing features
They had long sharp teeth and claws
The creatures couldn't say anything
Just roar
They charged at me
With all their might
Slashing my arms and my face
It didn't really look like they were in my sight
Until I saw their red, green and yellow glowing eyes
I fell to the ground
With blood all over my face
Don't forget broken arms
About five seconds later
Every part of my body changed
Became bigger, faster and stronger
All the creatures were in close range
So I Sprinted towards them
Grabbed one of their heads and smashed it through a brick wall
I'm not down in pain
I'm standing tall
So I grab another one by the throat
Threw him through a car window
Ended up with some blood on my coat
Two down three to go
Started throwing petrol all over the road
It's going to be like roasting toads
As I take out my lighter
The last three tried to charge me
But they slipped and flew higher
When they were in the air
I jumped as high as I could and threw them back down
I threw my lighter
And half the street was on fire
To kill them was my only desire
Well at the time
Seeing them burn
Was worth my while
Didn't even cost a dime
Ended up just walking back home
And Opened a beer
My wife asked me to do the dishes
Could only think of one thing to say
Yes dear
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is a funny little poem. It's kind of odd, but it's funny. Great job. 
Alyssa
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4th line "toed" would be "towed".
25th line: "head" in the tense you're using would be "heads".
38th line, I believe you're missing two words in the beginning, sugg: "high as".
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Cheers for the tip
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woah, scary! I get freaked thinking about driving on a desserted road, horror movie stuff! I like how you take back control of this situation instead of being the victim. very cool. And I like how you lighten it up at the end too. Frightening, powerful images! Great write
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Very unique and different poem liked the story I thank you for entering my contest much love, Raneika
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huh...?
don't really see the relation to the contest, but nice one anyway lol. -
Serious if I werent hellbent on following the rules this time this would get an award for sure...
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Hey now if I hadnt ben paying attention, I'd not have bothered to read this.
Boy, would I have missed out! This is a beautiful scarlet jewel... but you must select and submit ten lines to be elligable for the contest. Rules is rules. But dont remove this as if I get a silver and bronze - this may get an honourable mention... -
Wow,
What an ending.. lol.. I like the poem, and I appreciate ya sharing here.. It kept me captivated, and that's saying something for me. lol..
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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