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Breakup

With sirens waning, lights flickering and anxiety rising
Dashing toward the faint murmur of freedom in the distance.
Desolate in his nocturne heart that has all keyholes destroyed.
It is a steel cage in which there is no penetration.
His former self, blazing with passion is now the shrewed haggard.
Someday his burning heart will melt a new hole.
Someday.

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  • Ishtar
    April 21, 2008
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    Thanks for your entry


  • Polaja Greeters member
    March 19, 2008

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    This is an interesting poem, and I enjoyed the read unfortunately this isn't eligible for judging because you haven't used all of the words in the word bank - sorry!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    Wow,

    Now that's what I cal saying it how it is, or surely could be. Thanks for sharing, and all the best to ya with life and love.

    Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~