The sound of the sea gulls my love,
The always sluggish and elevated sea gulls
a sea of winter, gray waters
stained of cold in the rocks
Your arms, warming the waves
as wind quietly erases the eternal
figure of my love
The light and the shades
imitate your silhouette
a something in the air
That screams absurd to your ears
Is the sound of the sea gulls my love,
The always sluggish and elevated sea gulls
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This is piece that I never finished, a friend was holding a contest about sea gulls, and I never posted and anyway i still thought it was worth the sharing-
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"Your arms, warming the waves
as wind quietly erases the eternal..."
I practically live on the beach, but I doubt I've ever really seen a seagull... I have heard 'em though
I agree with Nicolette on the use of the metaphor
to envelop the theme of love in this, great work
Aj~
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the imagery here is wonderful, "...seagulls..Love" has the feel of an unimportant moment with someone so very important, and the image of the gulls took on meanings as you wrote the verses..an unfolding here...i enjoyed ...as Nicolette said..it is good to hear your poetic voice...PK
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So great to see you writing again, Leslie - I've missed your poetry around here! I love seagulls in poetry and I like how you've applied them as metaphor here... such powerful visuals and emotions they evoke. Lovely poetry... such a feathery weave of longing and love...
~ Nicolette
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thank you... actually this was written for one of your contests long time ago about sea gulls, but I never had the time to post it in time, so end it up here a few months late....
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graceful as those who fly
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nice.
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this is a wonderful poem the way it is written...the poetic dimension is also exciting within its own expression...
my favourite lines:
"Your arms, warming the waves
as wind quietly erases the eternal
figure of my love"
i really enjoyed this poem...thank you
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