further you drift from me
life slowly ebbing
as my sun slowly eases from view
soon only soul will remain
adrift upon life’s sea
dee garner
©march 10, 2008
Author notes
Photo credit
http://kizioko.deviantart.com/art/3-9-08-79593746
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie Picture Contest Two Choices by Kari.
300 points, ended March 10, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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How absolutely beautiful Dee: accepting of our next step - pure soul! Beautifully written. And thank you for your kind words about my work. I appreciate your feedback. -
This beginning is sad. Moving. The ebbing of life and the setting of the sun. All the warmth and light of life is gone...But then the soul survives and continues its journey. This is lovely and delicate. GLAD I read it.
~Joyce
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excellent~
Congrats on the gold sis....
This was definitely worthy of it
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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i thought the soul - the spirit of you was what was here anyay de seashells on the seashore and all that
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Its so cool to see what different people see in the same picture. You gave it so much depth! Congrats on the gold trophy
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awwww Congrats Dee very much worthy of the Gold, nicely writen poem, seems sad but yet look at the picture and just feel the breeze....
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You have made a lovely metaphor here, Dee. I haven't been in this situation, and I imagine that much of the ability to cope depends on personality and beliefs. This image of survival is very comforting. Congratulations on your gold.
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This is beautiful, I'm so glad someone chose that pic. Congratulations on the gold win!
♥
whisper
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Awesome take of the prompt Great write Dear Good luck with it in the contest
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Beautiful!!!
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