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Into The Wind

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

She reluctantly released

purloined love,

blazing like the letters

 

that once lifted her

elated spirit until

cruel intention played

 

its trickery for the

last time

as heartache soon

 

became ashen memories,

finally carried away

by the cold drafts of sorrow~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

I imagined this woman being heart broken by a cheating lover, and so I penned this little bit of fiction.

In a list

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • NatureIsBeautuful
    March 29

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    I like your style of writing. It is very unique. Well writen. Too bad that you didn't get gold^_^ Very good write.


  • adsaige gold member
    March 13

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    and i know the feel.
    it will drive
    someone absolutely mad
    with the pain and
    passion both then and
    in this write.

    the way you break it up
    can make or break it,
    but if you read it a
    certain way...it just...
    captivates you.

    you're so good i'm using
    words multiple times.

  • LilyAngel
    March 11
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    kool one man!

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 11

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    Wowzers!!! Fabulous piece!! You really have captured the picture MJ... just stunning! Ahhh the broken heart.....


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk
    March 10

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    i loved it! you expressed it so well. liked your take on the picture. thank you for entering and since you enlarged the picture...i hope you dont mind but i'll use it to replace my smaller one

    thanks


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    March 10

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    'cold drafts of sorrow'.... oh so final! Waiting for letters from a loved one then to have the words crush your heart can be devastating. Great imagery. J

  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    March 10

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    Oh daddy the feelings in this piece are so strong and beautifully sad but they express so much. I love you daddy


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 10

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    The feelings of loss came through your words so strongly. Beautiful but sad...final.




  • BellaD
    March 10
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    Beautiful poem!

    Another exquisite poem rolls off your pen...actually keyboard, but let's not get picky. Great job.

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