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My Promise to Stay (unbroke)

Missing image

Once
it was real
no fixation
but our lives
[intertwined at the hearts]

 

slowly slipping

falling away

trickery; deceit

wrapped your tongue

your poison words

feeding me by the spoon.

 

the rose [so fake]

a true symbol of us

beauty flowing

above the misery

suppressing all pains.

 

living through memories

bringing tears [I can't cry]

dried from the insides

blood, water, liquids

all dead [from you]

 

living death

broken hearted

sorrows slumber

in your grave

 

      for eternity.

 

 

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  • Blooming Poet
    March 24, 2008

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    memories can be so painful and hard to relive. I love this poem. Great picture and great tittle. Love this part:


    the rose [so fake]

    a true symbol of us

    beauty flowing

    above the misery

    suppressing all pains.




  • Firequeen
    March 13, 2008

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    This is a wonderful write
    so powerful.
    I really enjoyed this alot.
    Thank you for your entry
    Fire


  • thejollytinker
    March 10, 2008
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    Needles and pins.


  • joelegy
    March 10, 2008

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    verrry nice.
    sad.. but well written. the rose [so fake]

    a true symbol of us

    beauty flowing

    above the misery

    suppressing all pains.

    ^^ my favorite lines!

  • loveualways62
    March 10, 2008

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    Powerful poem my dear, so full of pain and anguish. Keep up the writing, you have real talent. Lovely picture of you too and only sixteen!

    Take care, Marian.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    March 10, 2008
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    Awesome work here poet!



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