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The might of lies

She dies,
empty
as raindrops fall from her eyes
Her breath
ceasing
as her world falls apart

She is not the girl you knew
Today you see she's someone new

No more tears like pouring rain
no more fears,no more complain

She cried,
silent
when you broke her fragile heart
Her cold body
trembling
when you left her in the dark

And still today, even if you think she's strong
Deep in her mind the scars will be never gone

She always knew that something missed
you took her wings,walked in the mist

Sometimes,at night
she disappears
but at sunrise wipes
all the tears
No need of you,to make her real
she only needs release to heal

Forget your name,the lies you told
the day you arrived,your smile was cold

She wants to live,though dead inside
so you can see the might of lies






Author notes

By Selene Dementia Tremere de Thanatos; for you, once more

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  • God is my reality
    August 10, 2008

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    Wow. This is really good. I love the rhyme scheme. The structures of your stanzas are a little weird, but that makes the poem more interesting. Great job and it was a pleasure to read such a great poem


  • Rachel21
    May 20, 2008
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    very well done


  • Little Lottie
    April 9, 2008

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    A very intense write. This is beautiful. It flows well, the couplets are lovely, and the rest of it is wonderful. Very good job, dear.


  • layla.
    March 11, 2008

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    ahh i see you have forgot a contest requirement---left alignment *hint*
    anyway, back to your poem. i think you have used good rhyming throughout, except in the couplet which rhymed with the words "love" and "dove". i think they are rather weak in a pair. but i liked your story, it is quite intense.
    a suggestion- "scars'll" this word disrupts the flow.

    thanks a lot for entering. good luck.

  • coddledsoul
    March 10, 2008
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    A haunting piece... well done!

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