You burn much slower than the passion of your own breath...
Wake to the sounds of silver as they rest upon your pillow
Take heed the warnings of yellows harsh alarms...
As they loom harshly about the stillness of your mind
Offerings of comfort from blues hue
As you were believed to have been sleeping
Of sound body and mind
You open doors allowing memory to spill unto the frozen grounds
Of hallowed walks
You should hesitate to remember...
As you watch in silence while the sun sifts its golden ponds onto the masses of death,laid to rest beyond winters leaves...
Pools of light ignite into tiny embers that laid dormant for forty years
in the stalled out halls of lost souls
Quiets wonder...
I remember the sounds of emerald green and the coolness that I felt beneath my bare feet
As I accepted the gifts of April and of its renewal of life
Never had I known that someday I may bathe in its light
Surrender to the opening of doors thought to have been lost in the silver lining of desperation's twilight
Still gasping for control
With the winds that call to you....simply hold on...
"See past the Shadow's that roam freely within your mind
Stumble past the words and return to your hallowed ground
To the place where you can be left alone to dance with the sun..."
Accept the brilliance of its life
as it restores a passion
and ignites your very soul
Resting deep in peaceful slumber
A mending of the stillness you believed once to be whole.
Thinking it to impossible to ever again attain.
Screaming if only for a moment!
I would have no one else to blame!...
Till his ignorance spews past lips of control...
If only just once more
My skin should tremble into that beautiful house of sublime
As his lips pass along the curve of porcelain skin
Allowing me to bathe in its eternal light.
In moments of passions end
I hesitate to find my breath
Until this cup runs over
And spills into the pools of Sabrina's cool Burgundy
Singing its song as it rides the current of temptation
Wrapping chestnut strands of silk upon the shoulders of soft rock
only then do I understand the opening of doors
and the taste of water I had yet to have known to be so pure...
Author notes
Art work credits...Dawn Gaia Nature Goddess Dhira Shaman
In his shadow I believe~
For DayDream Muse...I do thank you...smiles
A contest entry
- When Sabrina's Hair Falls To Reflection....Quote & Colour Theme by Blue Rew.
1170 points, ended March 20, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - WHEN SABRINA'S HAIR FALLS TO REFLECTION~Revisited**Invite Only!** by Blue Rew.
1170 points, ended May 10, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LETS MAKE A DOUBLE GOLD WINNER FROM YOUR GOLD WINNING POEM by Swan song.
600 points, ended April 12, 2008, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me what wins gold around here by AutumnGypsy.
550 points, ended August 28, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I can see exactly why this has won numerous trophies, this is a very well writen journey of self discovery, well done, best to you
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rediscover of oneself...this is breath taking
all your lines are so beautiful sensual and loving
an amazing picture to insire a poetess. double golden
so deserved!!! blessings always~ Trisha
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Sister Trisha~
Thank you my lovely, im so pleased you liked this one...smiles
Each time I read it I feel warmth and light..
Many blessings
~A~
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'sun sifts its golden ponds onto the masses of death,laid to rest beyond winters leaves...'
my favorite.
Some of this seemed a little clumsy; I think with some refining you'd have a real gem here.
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tinuelena
Thank you so very much for reading and for your wonderful comment, smiles
Many blessings
~A~
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What wonderful lines you have penned here in this poem, and have been rewarded well for it too. Congratulations. An amazing picture that served to inspire and a great interpretation.
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grannyeri
Thank you so very much ..smiles
I adore her artwork!
Thank you for reading me and for the wonderful comment..
Many blessings
~A~
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now this is serenely gorgeous...reading this poem is the equivalent of sitting in a June garden, on a warm afternoon with a waterfall trickling in it - lol...I LOVE this poem! Best of luck in the contest!
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ardentMarch
~ thank you so much for this beautiful comment...smiles
Many blessings to you..
~A~
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Now this was poetry! sensual lovely wording and something that I want to read again
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Swans song
Thank you so very much...smiles
Many blessings to you..
~A~
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Congrats on the gold!!
If only just once more
My skin should tremble into that beautiful house of sublime
As his lips pass along the curve of porcelain skin
Allowing me to bathe in its eternal light.
In moments of passions end
I hesitate to find my breath
Until this cup runs over
And spills into the pools of Sabrina's cool Burgundy
Singing its song as it rides the current of temptation
Wrapping chestnut strands of silk upon the shoulders of soft rock
only then do I understand the opening of doors
and the taste of water I had yet to have known to be so pure...
Aaaaahhh...this was really NICE to read today. I really love this one. I second every word in JohnnyD's very thoughtful comment he made on this piece, regarding the negative comment. I think there should be a "platinum" trophy for this one, too.
Don
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Don
Thank you so much for this amazing comment..
I really love this one too...and it took me such a short time to write it.
I really enjoy a write that takes on a life of its own.
I believe that JonnyD was a lion in another life and Im just a cub ..so he was forced to protect his own...lol
Thank you again
Many blessings to you and yours my dear brother
~A~
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Curious…….It also takes no skill as a poet to make continuous, empty comments on poems. We all can read abstract free verse blather as comments, but when it's poorly done, in a classless manner; it's unbearable to the point of being laughable.
And furthermore Melissa, when the Professor of English and Director of Creating Writing Communication Division of the Cultural Arts Center
Of Pepperdine University congratulates you on your Gold and says it is well
Written;
Well…….’that’ carries far more weight of experience than some utterly classless comments such as two you received on this particular pen.
Your poetry is lovely, as is your soul, so write on and ignore the flailing wails
of those so desperately seeking attention.
Len
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I'm going to be perfectly honest here & say that I got bored reading it & just skipped to your survey. It just didn't keep my attention.
Feel free to enter again or revise.
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blackday
I believe that I have over looked a few things of your poetry as well...
I saw the gold winner for another contest that you held and I understand the way in which I write is a bit more in depth then what your looking for, not only as a reader but as a poet as well...
I just do not write that way nor do I intend to...
Best wishes with your contest!
Many blessings
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It takes no skill as a poet to use continuous, empty metaphors. I can read abstract freeverse, but when it's poorly done, it's unbearable. Thanks.
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Wow, this righfully deserved gold, perhaps platinum? have to say this is one of your very best and I'm not certain how I missed it?
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This is just beautiful. Absolutely wonderful piece here. You never fail to write a gorgeous piece. Spectacular!
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Yunaleska
Oh my dear somehow I missed your comment here..so very sorry,.
Thank you so much for this wonderful comment....
So nice of you to read me...smiles
Peace and many blessings to you...
~A~
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Beautifully written. And congratulations on the gold. Well deserved.
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micol
Thank you so very much!
Many blessings
~A~
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I find it so hard to find a favorite line, they are all so beautiful..You open doors allowing memory to spill unto the frozen grounds
Of hallowed walks....Stumble past the words and return to your hallowed ground.....
To the place where you can be left alone to dance with the sun..." This is more than mere words on a page, this is pure essence of our subconscious.
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malmadre
Thank you so very much for your beautiful comment...smiles
This write holds dual meanings for me im so thrilled to see that it has taken gold...
Blessings
~A~
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OH my such a beautifully descriptive dedication and perfect for this contest. A beauty. Well done. ~Pamela
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Pamela
Thank you so very much my dear...Your comment adds so much more beauty to my page....
Many blessings
~A~
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That line is mine..smiles...it actually came about because I have a tiny silver wind chime just above my bed and it had fallen onto my pillow, I thought it odd that I had not heard its calling...lol...Alas the mystery is no longer just that...And you my friend are never boring!!...I handle brutal critiques very well and only crawl into a hole when my spelling is really horrid!!...
Thank you so much for reading me and for your wonderful comment...
Blessings to you Sir Robin...
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Wake to the sounds of silver as they rest on your pillow sounds like a line you stole from someone else. I assume you didn't and I wish I had written that. God, I'm boring! You always have something on the plate that is refreshing. You always have something in the salad bowl that requires a different dressing. Perhaps a special semantic vinegarette? It is always biting and the critique could be brutal if someone wasn't paying attention. But that would disqualify them, wouldn't it. RC
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""See past the Shadow's that roam
freely within your mind
Stumble past the words and return to your hallowed ground To the place where you can be left alone to dance with the sun..." this write is all about
rediscovery of oneself or dreams that have turned under. So much can be reborn and this verse brings forth this belief in a seductive flow.
I especially loved the intertwining of colours to
meanings/feelings. An inspiring dedication that
calls a soul back to the brighter shades of life.
Blue
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My dear Blue
Yes and for some of us finding that light seems to prove more difficult than for others...sighs...
At least now I know what it looks like...lol...
Thank you for such a wonderful comment and for this amazing contest..
Many blessings
~A~
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Oh this is so breath taking! You did wonders with the prompt. Truly! I am really flattered and smitten that this wonderful piece of mind altering imagery is dedicated to me. I am blushing immensely! Hugs and good luck in that contest!
DD
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DD
Thank you so very much...smiles
Blessings
~A~
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Amazing beautiful and enchanting, it draws one into the flavor and color of the moment, One of your very best Melissa.
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JohnnyD
I do thank you for such a lovely comment..
Blessings
~A~
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