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the flora etched walls
fall against cotton skin;
scantily-clad brick.

her fingers lace
into the broken sticks
[that prick her digits].
and bloody tokens
smear the leaves.

clumsy feet trip
on the rips in concrete.
[watch the cracks.]

she once broke
her mother's back;
just another mistake.

she can only stare
at the tears in flannel,
that lines her back.
those forgotten signs.
the odds are stacked [against her].

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Melted Dawn

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storiesuntold
June 29
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Very sad
I felt the unsteady beat of the heart of one so lost good write here
Naridill
March 16

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As Chandni said - beautiful, fluent and not forced. The perception in poetry you wrote here is stunning.
Thanks for entering,
Never Fall in Love
March 13

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OoOoOoOoOoO

I like this one, I found nothing wrong throughout and in many places, I didnt feel the rhyme - thats a good thing as it felt natural, not forced

Never ♥