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Your warm Storm

My skin needs quenching, and my eyes are burning alone
My feet are like dryed leaves, and my soles are screaming

My vision is violent as my lids open and close
And, I smell warm, moist, crimson rain.

Oh, how I lust in your bleed.
Dripping over my thirsty body.

I dreamed in my dehydration for you to come...
Pour down on me with your beautiful rain.

I drink to you and your taste.
I lay down in your warm storm.

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  • SuicidalLover
    March 14, 2008
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    This is twisted in such a cool way!
    Good luck!


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    Fascinating. This is pretty darn good. "Warm Storm" doesn't sit right with me, but it isn't bad. Good work and good luck ^.^


  • XxTwigxX
    March 11, 2008
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    this totally reminds me of a set of twins out of the book "lost souls" by poppy z. brite. the thirst for blood, the bloodlust of that person to make them beautiful again. Its a wonderful poem, poet.. keep it up, i want to hear more vampire stories..

    XxTwigxX


  • AlexGray
    March 10, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Intense and moving. I like it.


  • shadedgrey
    March 10, 2008
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    Cool! My favourite line is 'My vision is violent as my lids open and close' it's really effective.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 9, 2008
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    Like the presentation of this with the blood red picture, font and all on black background - very fitting for this contest and this write. Think you mean soles are screaming. Like the alliteration throughout these lines, the flow and the visuals this brings to mind as well.

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