tangled up in all that's left of you
i ponder implosion and eternity
and what's really beyond the veil, love,
can you hear me?
& thank god i've got a god to pray to
i knew i called you angel for a reason, i knew
and you've sprouted your wings
you're watching me
watching your daughter, windswept hair,
a smile like yours-- she doesn't know
why daddy's not at home,
but all those years ago
when i put your ring on my finger
i created a line like diamond wire,
a lifeline of sunlight,
now you breathe through me,
live, feel, know, remember--
& i tell you to live through me,
to watch with my eyes
and my fingers tingle
as i feel you and
i know some part of you
still lives within me
Author notes
I may be back with a better one. But I had to enter this.
In a list
A contest entry
- LISTENING TO THE DEAD by Three Doves.
1600 points, ended March 22, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is very deep and beautiful. Congratulations on your gold!
Peace Georgia
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due to your Authors Notes I question if this is a creation for the contest or factual moment. Either way I love your heart in the moment and thank you for your entry into the contest. My heart believes this to be true for I too live a diamond connection. Her name Althea was known to me as Mia for I called her my innocent angel. Peace in light and love. Be well.
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it's a factual moment.
I just wish I could capture it better. That's what I meant by trying to write a better one.
people may think I'm crazy... but I believe...
I called my love 'angel' all the time... little did I know...
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hmm, i like this. its a very different take on the subject than i was expecting. dwelling on a love one lost , it would seem, is never as fulfilling as giving them eternal life through ones self. nice write
/Red
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Poignant and tender. They live on this plane in more than our memory. They live on in who we are.
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