I walk among the ashes
of the things I used to know
picking through the wreckage,
wondering
how I got from there to here
I lift the smoke smudged book
to my face and see
the dog eared
pages of my youth.
Ah, here it is.
The list of cannots and do nots
The list of never enough.
That was the undoing
Because in the end,
I despaired at the thought of a God
whose favor I could never win.
With joy I embrace the thought
that Someone
Somewhere
knows my darkest
and my truest heart
And loves me fiercely anyway
You bite your pomegranate tongue
swollen with the words
you feel that you must say
Because I love you
I let you say your piece
Then shake it off
like a dog with the bathwater
You think I'm lost
But really
I am finally found
A contest entry
- God, Faith, Bitterness and Learning to Overcome by Away From the Sun.
700 points, ended November 12, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Some silly people...
God loves us, regardless...and forgives us whatever we fell remorseful for...but we must prove it, not just say it. We must make amends, if we can.
Anyone who says differently has no knowledge of Jesus and his mercy.
But they must read Jonathan Edwards and the like, just prior to the Salem Witch Trials?
LOL Just kidding...but, with some people, it's truth.
I am so glad that we are found...and blessed.
Thank you for your entry, your lovely, heartfelt words...
I'm sending you some clappy dudes for now. Maybe next contest I won't be so overwhelmed!
Love, Debbie
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Beautiful entry. You start off lost and confused, then found and sure of what you've found in yourself. Thank you so much for sharing and entering my contest! Debbie
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I really didn't like the last three lines, they seemed really cliche, and thats exactly what I didn't want in this contest. Love poems never really turn out that original. Thanks for entering, but this is not what I'm looking for.
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Well Written
A cleverly worded poem "Then shake it off with the bathwater" You're certainly not lost You've obviously
got a keen sense of humour.Loved it
My latest poems are called "Peter's Girl" "Lovers Lane
" Blue Eyes"and"Her Smile" take your pick see what you think George(JUDMC)U.K. Best Wishes
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Similar in tone to the first one I read, still has that need to be understood and not judged.
And we all want what you want, well, all of us normal folk...and no, normal doesn't really describe me.
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Yemassee,
If I'm not normal and your not normal then who are "us normal people"? LOL
You did get to the heart of it. There is nothing I want more than to be the real me and be loved for it. Unfortunately, it doesnt always work that way.
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How does one know if the poet is merely writing or it is something deeper? Either way I know the ending of this piece speaks reality to me. the first portion of doing or not doing is bondage, but you know that. The ending is about real freedom the kind that no one can take away. Rc
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Its always a pleasure to read your comments Robin, thanks for reading and giving your thoughts.
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wow, this is fantastic,
well done
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