SKY
(Sun vs Moon)
You bled my gold from sodden heart
From damp convictions, you bled my gold.
Swore it to stab right through you
Coarse and stream in rivets through you
From damp convictions, you bled my gold.
You showed me silver in desperation
In shining sickles, you showed me silver.
Tore your skin for gasps to touch it
let the darkness cloud to frame it
In shining sickles, you showed me silver.
MOON
'Neath waxing moon the night recoils-
She twists at stars within her morals,
Twinkles eager and fleetingly lingers.
Round-bellied whore and poet's love,
Rules my soul from in my blood
Presses out gold with bleached fingers.
Author notes
A couple of quick pieces... I wrote the following and the 2 were born beneath it:
I have learned to loathe the twitching sickle cast stubbornly in your upturned eyes, dreaming of moons and places far from here. When your lids flutter I could swear that I should take you for dead. Gone from here to somewhere, anywhere, nowehere at all because after all... isn't that where you always were? Not here with me but nowhere at all. Not there. Not anywhere.
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i don't know what to say... truly, i am speechless. returning to AP after such a long gap to read your poem has been a great pleasure to me. one thing i noticed was the structure of composition. you seem to be working in a formal structure, but i don't know what it is called. i loved the repetitions, and how they change with context. i didn't even realize that there were repetitions until my 3rd read!!
btw, i think the last word in stz 1, ln 3 should be "your" instead of "you" if you intend the sense to continue over to the next line. but i do accept that i may have got it wrong
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Nice to have you visit
The structure was accidental- I started writing and that's what happened. Perhaps it could be name after me, teehee.
Checked your correction and I intended for it to be 'you'.
I look forward to reading somenew work from you soon!
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like love whiskey
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wow.
beautiful. and now bookmarked.
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