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Heart-Warming

I wonder down the halls of my home,
Wondering what this feeling is with-me,
I look at my hair in the mirror it still needs a comb.
But all I can feel in my Chest is a great throbing,
What is this? Is it my heart finally breaking?
No! That can't be the case...I'm still with a girl.

Its hard to understand this feeling,
Its like, I want something so bad,
Yet its so out of reach...
My heart twists and turns under the yearning!
The painful peace driving a stake through it,
And then I realise its me Yearning,
Yearning for the one thing that makes me happy.

Being in the arms of my beloved,
Listening to her soft breathing against my ear,
Her gentle hands resting against my back,
And those three words that you said so calmly,
"I Love You"...

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This is for someone that genually means everything to me...she knows who she is...

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  • karissa
    June 2
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    Awww that almost makes me wanna cry its very touching


    • Findecano
      June 2

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      Awww thats great Glad that you felt so strongly about it I tried my hardest on this one


  • Xpianistpassionx
    April 28

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    "I LOVE YOU" the three most powerful words one can say to their beloved. very nicely written. i really liked. good job


    • Findecano
      April 28
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      Well thank you very much for commenting ^^ I tried hard on that one ^^ Glad you like it ^^ xD

  • Nihima
    March 17, 2008

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    awwww *hugglez* I have to say though that your last stanza is definately my favourite!

    Being in the arms of my beloved,
    Listening to her soft breathing against my ear,
    Her gentle hands resting against my back,
    And those three words that you said so calmly,
    "I Love You"...

    It's a much more softer stanza but I suppose that's what you were trying to get at.
    *Snugglez*

    • Findecano
      March 18, 2008
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      Hehe, glad you liked it ^^ The last Staza was meant for you. So yeah it was the one that I really tried to get right..


  • Nephlim
    March 10, 2008

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    Aww, sweet poem , someone should've commented on it by now evil peoples .
    I like the conflicting emotions this poem shows, love and pain [maybe not so opposite] but the confusion is definitely represented well =D
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly

    • Findecano
      March 10, 2008
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      Thanks for the comment, always nice to have them. I tried to use the opposites, but I couldn't really get the opposite of Love so well so I used pain. lol.

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