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Hopeless Girl

Missing image

I can’t begin to describe,
How empty I feel,
Was it really worth it all?

The memories, the pain,
I’ve just bottled it up inside,
Hoping it’ll go away.

I can’t run anymore,
It’s taking over my mind,
I’m falling, there’s no hope for me now.


Where is my love?
I’m trying so hard to find,
The pieces to this broken heart,

Where is my hope?
I’m afraid it was lost,
Buried under this hurt.

Where is my reason to live?
I’m afraid it’s over now,
There’s nothing left for me here.

I’m falling now,
I can’t seem to find,
A reason for anything.

I tried crying out,
But no one can hear me,
There’s nothing left.

It’s hopeless,
I’m hopeless,
Just a hopeless girl.

*By Raven Tears*

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  • Puppydog gold member
    September 8

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    SO SAD YET HAPPENING EVERYDAY

    Everyday somewhere there are children who are feeling this way, lost and alone with no hope or belief Maybe one day! 's


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    May 4

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    Sad.

    This was a great write, my favorite part was when you said " Where is my love?
    I’m trying so hard to find,
    The pieces to this broken heart,

    Where is my hope?
    I’m afraid it was lost,
    Buried under this hurt. "

    I can see the pain and tourture you feel, you make it come across very well. Amazing Thanks for entering it in my contest, good luck and best wishes.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 19, 2008
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    This is so sad

    We have all been there at one time or another but always remember if we close ourselves off to others and live only in the past we refuse ourselves to see all the love about us . Step out of the bounderies of sorrow and fly once again for the heart is so filled with love to rebuild and move on to a more wonderful life than one can ever imagine

  • VeritasLiberte
    July 23, 2008

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    I can SOOOOO relate to this! It's such a horrible feeling to lose hope! Especially when it involves LOST LOVE! Excellent write!


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    Hopeless? Only if we dont dream adn keep moving on after any hurts we have suffered.Life is what we create--nothing more!! However, many of us can feel
    like this so the poem had truth in it--


  • honorable mention
    March 28, 2008

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    Well...In my opinion I loved it. Sank me in from beginning to end. I can realte to the pain in these words. They screamed to me. Well done.


  • Scrunter
    March 26, 2008

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    I loved this piece so much that I could not take it out of the contest.
    Good luck and thank you for entering.


  • moluv10
    March 10, 2008
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    I really like this! love your take on the picture. best of luck in the contest.


  • Rianna Bear
    March 9, 2008

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    yes, a nice piece. what i liked most about it was your simple ending. it just rolls off the tongue and sums up every emotion. good job.

    *R

  • Scrunter
    March 9, 2008
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    Thank you for you entry, it's an remarkable write. Unfortunately it does not fit the criteria. The contest is 40 words only. If you was to amend this piece, I feel it would be a shame because it is such a heartfelt write. I would be honored if you could re-enter my contest with another piece, though in 40 words.
    Thank you
    Katey

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