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Money, Money, Money

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They say that money doesn’t buy happiness
But at least it’d get me out of my current mess.

No more hard looks from the man at the bank.
I’d make him cringe whilst I’d strut and swank

No more trips in a car full of rattles and shakes.
I’d be able to buy one with working brakes.

No more food bought ON the sell by date
I could have whatever I fancied upon my plate.

No more clothes with patches and darns.
I’d have suits made from my own special yarns.

No more working all the hours God sends.
I’d sit at home or just visit my friends.

No more rooms where I can’t even swing a cat.
I’d buy myself a penthouse flat.


 No more visits to the second hand book store.. ..
Hang on that's just what I WOULD use my money for
!

Author notes

If only I had just a little more money
I’m sure life would finally be funny.

This couplet started as my opening, was relegated to my ending and is now all lost and lonely. Please fee free to adopt it.
Jim

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  • darlintlc silver member
    April 28

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    Jim...have you been looking at my bank statement! lol

    This is so funny and so like most of us out there. My family is always talking about what we are going to do when we win that lottery!

    I think most of us just want to be able to live out lives without stress. lol

    As always a very good write!!

    • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
      April 28
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      I dare not look at my own never mind other peoples
      Thanks for digging through the back issues here. It is nice to be reminded of stuff I'd almost forgotten about.
      Jim

  • rufina caraid silver member
    March 16

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    Congratulations Jim. I enjoyed your poem, it's possibly what I would do plus buy a bigger boat. Well done! Von

    • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
      March 16
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      Many thanks for those words Von and for your own piece which inspired me to write this one.
      Jim

  • ea silver member
    March 10
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    yes, it would be better without the final couplet, since you asked. But I do like the funny tone the stanza on second hand book buying takes as it reveals
    your true concerns in an otherwise bothersome material existance. Thanks for the entry!


    • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
      March 10
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      Thanks for the reponse. That last couplet started as the opening but didn't seem right there either. I'll reject it to the naval scran-bag.
      The book line was included for just that purpose (and it is true for me anyway).
      Thanks for the inspiration your competition provided.

  • Kalima
    March 9
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    Now this was funny...Everybody could use alot of money...I know I could...Stace
    • Thanks for reading and writing Stace. When you get yours can you lend me some?
      Jim
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