here in virginia
such a pretty sight
trees that bloom in pink and white.
the ocean and mountains
lay two hours each
one to the south and one to the east
the rivers runs
at a beautiful pace
and its called the james
filled with beauty and grace
down town richmond
the captial here
has a great university
and old histories too
there is monument avenue and
the maymont zoo
and is all free to the public too
here in virginia theres so much to do
but it all depends on what you like to do
so ill pull down the blanket
put pillows on fresh
as you decide what features you like the best
A contest entry
- Introduce the World to Your Place by fantasysmurf.
711 points, ended March 18, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I've never been there but your poem shows me that it would be a good place to visit, for such is your beautiful imagery of the place you live. Only one typo I see, ''moument''. I think that should be ''monument''. Thanks for sharing and take care.
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thank you i fixed the typo
i appreciate that very much
bless you
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key comforting phrases like "at a beautiful pace" liked
postcard with a personal spot
you turned my head from that first stanza, but the next verse set was with settling coordinates. It motivated such an expansion of visit to make home with.
from there main activity that's around a route to such calm, sounds nice.
your ending speeds up emphasis of suggesting seeing the area to resting with idea as guest almost!
thanks for checking out some of my work,
babies are my subject -
Nice,
My mother is from west virgina, and I've been through both states, I have relatives from virgina as well. Such a beautiful state. We visit almost every other year. Thanks for sharing, enjoyed this.
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Nicely done
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Excellent
I loved alot about this poem - the rhyme, the sights, the geography and especially the last stanza: "so ill pull down the blanket/put pillows on fresh/as you decide what features you like the best". I am so glad to hear about all these wonderful places. Boy am I going to have to do some travelling!! This entry sure has some potential, it captured the contest perfectly. Bullseye shot!
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Sounds lovely
You mahe it sound so very lovely . Perhaps a place the one day I shall visit to enjoy all it's beauty and glory
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aw this is so cute, you sure put Virginia, in a proper prospective view, she sure is pretty, been there many times... good luck in the contest...
Moons
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A wonderful description of your state..I would enjoy visiting there one day! Good luck in the contest.
Niaish
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