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In The Gardens of Your Femininity

Come my love, oh delicate lotus of mine

Let me taste of your sweetness oh so fine

 

I beg, allow me the joy of your fervent sighs

As I travel the path up your perfumed thighs

 

Please tell me of your deepest desire my dear

As my lust strengthens and towards you I steer

 

Like flower’s sweet nectar, that beckons the bee

I hunger for your honey that calls out to me

 

And as my passion grows with excited measure

My only heartfelt wish is to give you pleasure

 

Please open the gate of your soft sensual field

So that I may graze in your pastures that yield

 

The fruit of nirvana and many other delicacies

That urgently call out, “Come taste of us please!”

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • BearWoman gold member
    March 27

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    Dang!

    This is one of the hottest writes of yours that I have read. Especially enticing is:

    "Please open the gate of your soft sensual field
    So that I may graze in your pastures that yield

    The fruit of nirvana and many other delicacies
    That urgently call out, "Come taste of us please!" "

    Congratulations on the Bronze. If that's all you got for this, I think I'll have to check out your competition...


  • Mrs D
    February 4
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    THIS IS LOVELY ......SWEET FLOW,VERY SENSUAL !!! GOOD LUCK


  • ennovy silver member
    January 31

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    This just totally beautiful...very sensual in a classic erotic form......You show much talent and desire in your words.....excellent poem...Novy


  • Nymphetemine
    January 31

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    Wow this is such a poetic write. Beautifully written. The rythme you use is erotically delicious.
    Good luck in the contest
    ValkyrieNightWeaver.


  • Gulfbreeze
    October 27, 2008

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    Fainted on the floor

    Enchanting, exotic, rapture...need I go on? I need to go take a cold shower now
    My Favorite Lines:

    "Like flower’s sweet nectar, that beckons the bee

    I hunger for your honey that calls out to me



    And as my passion grows with excited measure

    My only heartfelt wish is to give you pleasure"

    The most senually erotic piece I have ever read....


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      October 27, 2008
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      Thank you dear, you are very sweet to say such things. I'm glad you enjoyed my heart's labor.


      mj.

      • Gulfbreeze
        October 27, 2008
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        heart's labor

        you are welcome, but i only speak the truth.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Nice meter and rhyme in this sensual write! Job well done! I enjoyed it! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great writing!


  • Touchof1der silver member
    March 30, 2008

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    Talk about sweet beauty... this piece is drenched in it. This is absolutely breathtaking. Your words flow down the page in a river of loving admiration that is undeniable. Exquisite writing! Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeaors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • LiMarie silver member
    March 21, 2008

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    Mmmm oh delicious... This is so deeply kind and passionate.. so lovingly penned. Just the kind of lover everyone wants .."I beg allow me the joy of your fervent sighs" Ah sigh indeed! "Please tell me of your deepest desire" Yes that's what making love is..you just want to give give give and you've written it so beautifully. I enjoyed this thoroughly..every word.


  • adsaige
    March 13, 2008

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    i'm glad you entered, but i'm
    said that you did not win a trophy.

    it's an absolute shame, but it's

    worth gold in my books.

     


  • twiztidXxXbeauty
    March 11, 2008
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    wow baby..this is really good..i love it!


  • TheClimb
    March 10, 2008

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    Incomplete...

    This was very nicely done! You stir up the emotions with your words, but somehow I feel as though I am left hanging....

    Best of luck in the contest!
    Concrete Angel


  • LittleMoon silver member
    March 10, 2008
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    Speachless............... (but thinking a lot)


  • LilyAngel
    March 10, 2008
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    soooooo good....yummy!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    *passes out*

    Trying to keep my comment generic but HOT DAMN! LOL... I dunno what to say other than hot hot hot and wow wow wow... I'm leaving it at that

    Beautifully sensual and artistic as always!!


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    oh this is such a beautiful and sensual piece.the emotions within this is amazing and just wow. you always amaze me daddy


  • michichoeret
    March 9, 2008
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    very good

    very sensual and not crude at all
    a great write a pure turn-on even


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    You've put together some wonderfully sensual and romantic thoughts in a beautiful way. Best wishes in the contest.




  • Godless But Divine gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    Pleasure










    Crawl with taste on silky skin,
    Inhale desire from passion's bin,
    Touch the thighs, breast and all,
    A sultan thou art, yet like a slave thou crawl,
    Thou've seeked passion in springs of lost,
    Cause pleasure thou've care to give the most.


    Nicely penned,hoped it was a bit longer, yet goodluck in the contest.

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