Flitting from flower to flower
gossamer wings ever so gracefully
alight on food for the soul.
Dazzling colours demurely hover
catching prisms of soothing tranquility.
Silently, velveteen delicacy
descends to rest on tender petals,
knowing that demise is calling.
With fevered movements,
life is quietly perpetuated.
Author notes
Use this line to inspire you:
have you ever heard
something so soft
as the sound
of snow falling
(10 lines)
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF 1 DAY QUIKIE(10-10-until I get back home) by garbait.
1100 points, ended March 9, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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gorgeous. the use of vocabulary and how you make it all work and fir into place! Simply truley talent! I wish i could write like this! thank you for letting me read some of your work!
<3
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Absolutely Beautiful
What a beautiful poem and simply wonderful piece of writing this is. Its so delicate almost ephemeral in its qualities. Butterflies are such delicate and wonderful creatures and you have captured these qualities so well. I loved this. Thankyou for sharing its magic with me. With love & all my very best wishes from Rose xxx ps.Congratulations on the gold trophy, it's thoroughly well deserved.
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Exquisite write...the flow, so liberating, so free. I think you caputred the image of a care-free butterfly so well; I can just imagine her flowing calmly through the summer air.
"Dazzling colours demurely hover
catching prisms of soothing tranquility."
Such peace, yet such strength in those words.
Simply beautiful.
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100th HOODWINK !
Gaylene,
As a lover of well done nature poetry I am awed by the beauty of this write. You have captured the beauty and essence of this most wonderful yet silent creature that God bless our sight with. Well done!
Congratulation on the Gold Trophy, well deserved!
You have been chosen as a victim of our 100th Hoodwinking Celebration for The Poetic Bandits group. We want to let you know we love AllPoetry and all you have done to make it the wonderful Poetic Community that it is. Your efforts have been noted and you are appreciated. Thank you!
Dennis (Gray Elk)
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butterly
wow this is awesome and pretty!!! a gold trophy well deserved!!! have a nice day, and keep writing! -slick99 -
Excellent
So very well done. Powerful wording. Congratulations on the gold.
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Hit the brakes!...
... Thats what your poem tells me. How often do we forget to pay respect to all the wonders so small along the way. Your poem seems to show a short moment in slow-mo, what I normally see in 3 or 4 seconds and then continue my work. You zoom in to the seemingly less important moments and raise them to the surface again, where they belong. Thankyou by Der Lurch
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What cool images - "alight on food for the soul," "velveteen delicacy - descends to rest," and "demise is calling" are my favorites. Congratulations on the gold.
Marlene
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oh this stunning just stunning your words speaking so much and displaying so much.it made me smile which is what i needed well done gran
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Oh this is such a calming and peaceful poem. ^^ Made my day a bit brighter!
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Intriguing title and beautiful poem, delicate and vivid.
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A tranquil piece
Softness and the gentle wings paint this poem so beautifully.
Julie
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Beautiful poem. I love butterflies.
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Sigh... the beauty of the butterfly....and the silence if it's movement..oh you do capture this perfectly... gorgeous piece hun, goodluck in the contest
Karen
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Butterflies, nature's hovering rainbows.
Softness, beauty, and life short lived.
Very nice.
Thank you for the entry.
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