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In the air tonight

In the air tonight,
cold breeze of betrayal,
fills the atmosphere.

It blows away,
all the sweet venom
you injected me.
the burning candle in me.
the dust,remaining
of our glassy bond.

In the air tonight,
it whispers to me.

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 9, 2008

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    Great write, love the way you took the prompt of the song, I love that song. I like the use of betrayal, truly this is what its all about, being in the air. Nicely written.