I need to remove
jagged bits of farewell
you left in silent escape ~
leaving my portrait of dreams
held between sun up and darkness.
I extract my tears with memories...
Author notes
prompt is: Antidote
A contest entry
- Word Prompt 3 by Seeking Peace.
550 points, ended March 9, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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DSR that's really dear
lines four and five emote how torn up the nonspoken thousand words per se can make for a changed image. It sifts it to serious versus a sarcastic chance, which then trembles on antidote for me with the ending. there is a sadness in how we are given an effect to reflect treated day but we can pull time momentarily for feeling as when we cry out or more...
quite composed to notice heavy situation, whether a child in house not to be split from thoughts or proximity for any of us to keep approximating by until love of forward isn't rough.
no strange congratulations for the silver,
babies are my subject -
Sigh... this is a great piece here, think I know this one in my heart right now.. superb
Thanks for taking the time to enter my contest, wishing you the best of luck
Karen -
Brilliant!!
Wonderful write hun
Words the tugs hard on the heart...
"jagged bits of farewell
you left in silent escape ~"
Outstanding take on the word prompt!
Wish you the best in the contest
Much love
Many blessings,
~David~
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wow just wow each word is deep with a train of thogught that pulls the reader in to linger over the words.well done mommy
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Deep
Very well done, exceptional train of thought.
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