I ran up the rocky path
My brother close behind
Between the trees of evergreen
Our spirits free from bind
Yells of pure excitement
Laughter ringing in the air
Echoes bouncing off the walls
Of canyons far and fare
The sky blue up above us
The sun so golden bright
The happiness within our hearts
And souls lost free in flight
Sprinting hard and hapless
We ran down mountain trails
Thrilled by our adventure
And the phantoms in our tales
We fought the firey dragons
Saved those living in despair
We caught the vicious outlaws
And tamed the grizzly bear
We streaked back to the cabin
When we heard dinner bells ring
We sat down with our parents
And told them everything
We talked of how we ruled the day
With strength and courage, too
We sang songs of our heroism
Honor bound and true
Our parents praised our glory
And sliced an apple pie
To celebrate our victories
As knights, cowboys, and spies
We sat around the fire
Spinning yarns that grew like weeds
Until it was time to fall asleep
And dream of all our deeds
Author notes
I tried to use this poem to tell a narrative story but doing so in rhyming verse. I think that it came out fairly well but would appreciate any opinions or advice that anyone might be able to offer me. I hope that it was at least an enjoyable read for all.
A contest entry
- Sapphire's Saga by Sensual Sapphire.
3530 points, ended April 3, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Did this poem sufficiently tell a narrative story descriptively enough to offer the reader the appropriate visual imagery?
Comments
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I think you did a pretty well job on writing this poem. It was really a cute piece. Good luck in the contest and keep up the writes.
much love
~~Tori~~

