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when they were beautiful

When they were beautiful

Untainted by wisdom

Bereft of such sustenance

Only time satisfies

So hungry, impatient

Devouring life In raw bloody chunks



When they were beautiful

When thirsty they drank

The juice right from the fruit

Nothing harnessed nor contained

Fearing anything between

Themselves and their craving

Only stood to impede fulfillment



When they were beautiful

Might one depart Amidst such voracious vitality

Choking on life...

Instilling the others with

Tremendous grief

Reverence and envy



When they were beautiful

Much to be learned, yes

Lessons best left untaught

Believing the price is too high

And the deceleration, contagious

Echoes of life reach much farther

When one dies while still beautiful

So went the unspoken consensus



When they were beautiful

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  • Dark Magician
    March 13, 2008

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    kewlness

    This was really good. I think your message here is about someone with an eating disorder. That's what it sounded like to me. This poem had great flow and rhythm and you expressed this topic really well. Great write and Great job!!!