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Why it's Sweet,sweet Lies...!

Body shivers,
soul trembles,
by spears of motions,
that are truly cold.

Lover,
please don't.
Hush...
Trust,foundation.
trembled,
in light breeze of betrayal.

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prompt:trembles

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think as i'm trying to improve my english

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  • Seeking Peace silver member
    March 9, 2008

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    This is a wonderful take on the prompt, some beautiful images within, great job

    Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen