Coloured feelings drift
Over blood splattered parchment
Written with Coloured inks
Her story; her life
Author notes
Title prompt Rainbow Glitter
In a list
please tell me what you really think
Comments
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This short verse was filled with imagery. My only suggestion would be to find another word for "coloured" in the first line. This poem is too brief to reuse the same word. Something powerful would catch the reader's attention. Perhaps "kaleidoscopic" or "prismatic" would give an added punch. Peace, Liz
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Short and filled with such a sad emotion. A very interesting look at this title. What happens when all that color disappears? I would like to see this taken just a little further. It is very good and don't get me wrong. I just feel there could be a little more in between.
Excellent take and thank you for sharing with all of us. Keep it flowing. Love and God bless, Joyce 
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awwww sweetheart...s Another sad yet gorgeous write. beautiful job my sissy.
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