I watch as you sleep:
Your short breaths of air,
Your calm expressions...
You are my everything.
I watch as you dress:
Your masculine torso,
Your muscular thighs...
You are my everything.
I watch as you walk to me:
Your slight swagger,
Your warming smile...
You are my everything.
You are my air,
You are my life,
You are my love.
You are my everything.
A contest entry
- THE PERFECT LOVER by liquidmindforever.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 14 entries
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This isn't about anyone in particular. I just hope that this poem will one day become my reality. To have a love that runs as deep as the ocean, and soars as high as the sky.
Comments
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Aww this is so beautiful. Each stanza is filled with the love you have for the man in your life. That is true beauty in its own.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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This was lovely, and incredibly realistic for something created with no firm inspiration...if you get my meaning?
Beautiful wording
♥
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This was beautiful. I love your idea of, what seems to me, a perfect morning with someone you love dearly. Sounds like a good experience to me. LOL. Thank you for entering!
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yah, I have to agree with evryone this was a wonderful poem, so tender,and intimate....and you just wrote out perfectly..one hope of mine also..very pretty poem!
-Lu
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Very nice, good rhythm. Sweet dreams, eh?
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This piece is so sweet and sensual. It brought a smile to my face, and also made me long to have what you described. Don't we all go hoping?
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Just a wonderful poem and it brings to mind a man, tall, dark, handsome, loving, kind, and tender with words of passion. Awwwww! what a man, I hope this turns to a wish...and your wish comes true...excellent writing...novy
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Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest: THE PERFECT LOVER.
If you will please look at the RULES you will note
that there is a wordbank required and the words that you use are to be placed in the AUTHOR'S NOTES.
When you comply with this, please im and notify me
with the name of your poem entry and I'll be pleased
to read your entry.
Wishing you well.
LOVELIGHTPEACE
liquid -
a little creepy, but i like it. good read and we all want some one to tell us that.
also welcome to the group.
KNIGHT TIME
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such a lovely poem. Reminds me allot about a song by Micheal Buble.
Lovely poem and im sad that I have to do this. But you did not comply to the rules. I'm a fair judge, and rules are rules.
All the best for the future in contests!
Becks
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Enchanting!
A beautifully written piece that
caresses the heart and stir the emotions.
Very vivid and well constructed.
Intimately sweet and romantic.
A real treat to read.
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again a beautiful poem from you.. very truly said your world is centered around that one person you love.. your happiness, sadness, everything gets associated with him.. thanx for sharing Emma..
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When i read this i really thought that this had happened to you.
.... no but you put out the imagry so well it really seemed real, you have a great way of expressing feelings and visual interpretations. The only thing that i would look at for this poem is the lines 5-8. this just seemed the most forced part here. My favorite part is the last four lines. This is really nice and i hope you find him someday!
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ahh soo sweet! I hope one day your wish comes true!
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