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In Its Purest Form


In its purest form
two halves can become a whole.
Two hands intertwine,
tangling their pasts and futures
making each breath taste so sweet.


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  • Swan song gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    Very romantic gave me a case of butterfly belly. Well done!!!! Check syllable count in last linte tingling is three or two? I'll check


  • SweetRoses
    March 13, 2008
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    This is so sweet and cute. I love it.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    A beautiful piece. Full of feeling and in so few words, not an easy task but you have done it very well. Superbly penned, good luck