It's just like farting
(with your mouth);
But instead of polluting the air
with a million
microscopical pieces of shit,
you dillute my aura
with decibels.
Author notes
A blond and metaphorical drunk moment while listening to Jovy's snore.
I guess everyone has his moments huh...
A contest entry
- Best Prewrites From March 2008 by Amaranthine Lover.
525 points, ended May 1, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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LOL> This is funny. I really liked the metaphore. Lol I don';t really get the title. Why not just microscopic? Oh well. Nice write. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I found a bit of humor in the last poem, and I definitely read it in this one. A good poem that you have written here.
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*Laughs* Well, interesting to say the least. You definitely found something original to talk about. And you went about it in a creative way. Well done!
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something about this that I like
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you're still the shit!
Hello old friend! Boy things sure have changed around here, I don't know what the hell Im doing, I feel very lost...anyway..I loved this piece, you have not lost your charm nor your humor and I look forward to reading more of your poetry. XOXO Shannon aka ladylyric
p.s. your still as hansome as u were 4 years ago and Im thrilled to see that you are still with Jovy!
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Oh my...i laughed out loud when i read the first line...lol call me immature. but the poem as a whole i think is quite good. you have a perfect tag for it...adult humor. thats exactly what it is...and i love that you place a lot of attention to something that most people wouldn't even consider writing about...snoring. good job
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LMFAO I loved this
It's so funny but it is on something all can relate to 
Well done and best of luck 
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ooohhhh i can relate! i sleep next to a snorer to. Well actually if i don't fall asleep first i lay awake and listen to his mouth 'farting' lol. I love that analogy.
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Now this is abstract with humor....
Keep penning -
aww nothing to damper the evening like a dilluted aura! i enjoyed this very cute. take care, now
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AWESOME
great write... you are def. one of my favorites... this is pure comical and pure poetry... all about the norm... great read, also... thanks for sharing
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I think it goes beyond the snoring...I think you have some deep-seated issues, lol. Ignore me...as usual.
Yem Freud.
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i agree with Nicolette about the 'snore book'
i'm serious! it would sell imagine all this poetry inspired by snoring
you cracked me up with your delicate prose
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Oh wow!!!! This is sooo funny, so very witty and so well-written, Leander!!! I told you, you are going to have a snore-book very soon. Great one - thanks for the smiles on this very warm, sticky Sunday in South Africa!!!
You are just too funny - and too damn good!!!
~ Nicolette
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that was funny, but with great style! i think only you could come up with something like that, and i loved it!!! i wish i could give you a high five!!!!
*R
p.s. can you make your font bold, or something. hurts the tender eyes!
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Thanks hunny - lol.
Dang, if I knew you'd love this, I entered it in your contest
lol
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back atcha! yeah! you totally should've entered that! i got such a good kick out of it...hey, i've got a sense of humor too!
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This made me chuckle. You are so clever!
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you are too funny.
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NARF!
nicely done
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