Your wild hair in the wind,
A broad grin on your face.
What a time to remember.
The best days of our lives.
The jokes we always played,
We fought but only once.
Those memerable minutes after...
The best days of our lives.
Live today like there is no tomorrow,
Show the world we won't back down.
Be how we want to be, live how we want to live.
Making everyday the best day of our lives.
A contest entry
- Exercise your Want by ErrantHeart.
900 points, ended April 15, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I wrote this poem after a dream that I had. I feel that one dayit will become my reality but one can only hope.
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
Thank you so much for your entry.
You have, however, used some wants in your final stanza, something I make mention of in my contest rules that entrants not do. It's amazing how words will sneak in unbidden. Also, memerable should be memorable.
You've shared some pleasant thoughts, thank you.
-
Emma.. what a lovely poem this is when i read the title, it reminded me of that song "The summer of 69" by Brian Adams.. beautifully written, ya days spent with your friends, with your loved ones they are indeed the best-est days of your lives.. thanx for sharing..
-
Looking at this poem, i don't really know what it is about. friends? husband? dad? mom? I don't know who you are talking about so i can't connect with your writing. But as usual you have great imagry, which i love, but i dont know what the context it about it. You know that i love your writing, this is the first one i can't connect with and love so much. Sorry, but I just don't know what to make of it.
-
-
On Best days of Our lives
It was about a boyfriend. Tose memorable momens after... Get it? It is okay that you cannot connect with it but maybe that helped put the puzzel pieces together!
Emma
-
-
This poem is so adorable! ^_^ It reminds me of the times I feel happiest with my phenomenal boyfriend- Rei. :] I love the repetition of "The best days of our lives". I feel it adds to the poem's meaning a lot. :] Wonderful job on this! The ending is especially cool when you change the repeated line a tad. ;] Keep writing!!
-Lily ♥
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
