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Instead of Her

How can I have you
When you are with her?
Do you know how I feel?
Maybe it's just a phase.

I wish you were with me
But I don't want to hurt her.
Why must it be so hard?
The path will never end.

You take her hand,
You kiss her lips.
A bit of me dies inside.
I wish it were me instead of her.

I know I'm being selfish,
I would never interfere.
But what if you wanted
Was so far yet so near?

A contest entry

Hasn't everyone had a time where they couldn't have who they wanted?

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  • XxSuicidal-LovexX
    August 9, 2008

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    The last stanza really spoke to me. I can see the heartache and emotion in here, and feel it too. Great job and good luck


  • God is my reality
    July 29, 2008
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    I really like the ending. I can kinda feel the emotion, but it isn't %100 percent there. I'm not here to judge. It's your feelings. Good job and good luck in the contest

  • God is my reality
    July 29, 2008

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    I really like the ending. I can kinda feel the emotion, but it isn't %100 percent there. I'm not here to judge. It's your feelings. Good job and good luck in the contest


  • emoangie
    July 18, 2008

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    IVE BEEN THROUGH THAT KINDA. BUT ITS NOT THAT HE WAS WITH SOMEONE ELES HE WAS MAD AT ME BUT HE JUST DIDNT WANT TO TALK TO ME. I LOVE HIM THOUGH BUT ANYWYS, I REALLY LIKE IT. ITS GREAT AND I LOVE IT. NICE.


  • xCandieKissesx
    May 14, 2008

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    I can relate to this. It's really hard to get over someone you have feelings for. I know how you feel, it's tough. Beautiful write! Thanks for sharing it and good luck!

    + Jackie


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 13, 2008

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    I know what you mean, I think my ex is with someone and it breaks my heatr as I still love him so much, even though I have a new partner I still am not over him, I really can understand your feelings.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    May 3, 2008
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    thank you for entering and good luck


  • jazzerina
    April 15, 2008

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    AWESOME!

    This is so similar to what i have been going through in my life for the past couple of years that it is uncanny! I can COMPLETELY understand it! I think my favorite part is:

    I know I'm being selfish,
    I would never interfere.
    But what if you wanted
    Was so far yet so near?

    I know how hard it is to be so close to someone and want them, but they are already taken...and you don't want to interfere, but at the same time, it eats you up inside...GREAT write and thank you SO much for entering the contest!!


  • sanity
    April 8, 2008

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    this is sweet and so heart felt... thank you for sharing and good luck.... hugs and love Linda xxxxxxxxxxx


  • Glass Heart
    April 1, 2008
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    I've been in the same postition and I'm sorry you've gone through it too. Thank you and good luck.


  • sapphireangelwings
    March 30, 2008

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    This is lovely in the power of expression. It is so tinged with emotions. I liked it a lot. One thing though...did you mean But what if )))what((( you wanted was so far yet so near? Seems to read better with the added word...


  • Neha Kaushik
    March 21, 2008

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    ya i could relate to it.. you've expressed the deep feelings associated in such simple and powerful words.. loved reading it.. thanx for sharing..


  • Chocoholic156
    March 17, 2008

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    You had me so tense through this poem. I love it! You are creating a feeling that connects the reader to the feeling. I fell in love with the last stanza, again. I don't know what it is but i always love your last lines... its a gift of yours i guess. Always remember that, the last lines are the lines... well that the reader will read last! Go figure. That is what they leave with and you really are good at that. I really don't have anything that i could say to improve this poem it is so good. Wow, you are using all of my applauses. Gosh darn you! No really, i am glad to do it! KEEP WRITING!


    • xox-emma-xox
      March 21, 2008
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      It now has worked out to my advantage! They just broke up. She broke up with him and doesn't seem to mind about it. He has said that he liked me before but wouldn't date me but maybe that has changed. I so want his opinion on the matter to change, and for the better too! I feel sorry for him but don't want to move in to quickly. Got any advice?!!! Patiently? Waiting,
      Emma.
      P.S, I have changed my name to I-Love-Donegal, just so you know. All the best*_*


  • larkbird
    March 8, 2008

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    Ouch

    Oh, do I ever know that feeling. Especially not wanting the other gal to get hurt. But good news. Sometimes it is just a phase.
    Other then that, this is a really great and emoutional poem. Well done.
    God Bless

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