Growing up was really Hard
My future seemed like a game of Cards
I could win, loose, or Draw
Loosing seemed to conquer them All
There was always one to make me Smile
Reaching my ears, longer than the Nile
Her name was Lynn and she was my Aunt
Not once would she ever use the word Can't
For 14 years I could always count on Her
When with her, everything else was a Blur
She was my role model, almost white and Black
Yet she faced something that held her Back
Lung cancer is no laughing Joke
It hit my reality every time she Choked
Growing colder and quieter I started losing Hope
Even with my parents, I just couldn't Cope
One day I went to show her my Love
My uncle in tears, A site I cant speak Of
He told me to rush to the hospital to say good-bye
I couldn't understand the tears in his Eyes
Now visiting my Aunt, she isn't Responding
I run to my Dad as he is Calling
"Chris, It's time to say Goodbye"
"We just got here daddy, why daddy, Why?"
As I am now 17 she is not by my Side
I know understand the tears in his Eyes
Shedding my own, I know how it Feels
I will be with you soon as my heart slowly Peels
Author notes
I am always thinking about you
A contest entry
- March New Members contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 8, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This piece is so very sad. I lost someone the same way, very sad. But the piece also was clear to me and I was relating all the way through. Nice work!
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Welcome to AllPoetry
This is a moving piece you have written. I think it would flow a little better on the page if you didn't capitalize the words at line ends and checked the spelling of some words again. On the other hand, this seems one of those poems that are really tough to write... I'm really sorry for your loss. I liked the peeling heart image at the end of the poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
This hits home for me as I lost my GodMother to cancer when I was 15 and no one told me she had passed away until the day before the funeral.
Amazing write; well said.
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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This is truly sad an such a hearfelt write. I felt the emotions in this piece very clearly.
The rhyme was a little choppy in places, but overall, the message was vivid, sad and hertfelt.
Thanks so much for your entry
Gaylene
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='( Wow this is so sad! I love this poem to death. Straight up it is the best poem that I have read all the while I was here! This is also the saddest srry you lost your aunt she seemed like such a great person someone you need in your life. It's sad that you don't have her now! But lung cancer is no joke my mom had it!This is a heart-wrenching poem it shows how close you were to your aunt! Amazing! My favorite lines would have to be " Lung cancer is no laughing Joke// It hit my reality every time she choked// Growing colder and quieter I started losing Hope// Even with my parents, i just couldn't Cope" =[ Great Job it's fantastic =]
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It sounds like your aunt was a very special woman and special in your life. This is a very heart felt write. Keep writing...it can be very therapeutic. Hey, by the way...I'm from Canada too! Hail to you fellow canuck! ***Pam***
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