pestilence forthcoming totally unsuspected
overshadowed overwhelmed overlooked
ungrateful ignorance overtaken
willfully mortal souls stricken
fatal wrath dealt by forces unseen
Author notes
20 word Quickie Contest
Option B:
'Dies irae, dies illa
Solvet saeclum is favilla'
translated to
'Day of wrath, day of danger
will disolve the world in ashes,'
excerpt from Mozart's 'Requiem'
In a list
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
975 points, ended March 8, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Invite For... HM winners Judged by RedwingSpirit.
475 points, ended April 7, 2008, 46 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
GIVE ME YOUR HONEST REACTION
Comments
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I know we live in what the Bible calls "the time of the end" and we will begin to see more and more evidence that the 4 horsemen of the apocolypse are leaving their trail of woe, including the "pestilence" and "fatal wrath" that you write about. If you find the time, please read my http://allpoetry.com/poem/447153
Moses
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That was powerful, you have quite a way with words.
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Well writen and so true meaning to the conclusion of the days
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This is really powerful!
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creepy...haha! Well done I like it!
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Scary indeed....
Best wishes and good luck,
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how scary ...
amazing, how in so few well chosen words, you were able to tell a whole story ... and what a story ... your masterful use of imagery and metaphor together with other poetic devices, creates a powerful scenario in the reader's mind and the emotions that go with it ...
you did a great job here ...
thank you for your participation,
maa
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Very well done Congrats on the bronze
Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest I wish you the best of luck
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i think of the bible here - our own damnation lies in the way we live inside everyday, good alliteration used.
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this is fantastic
and spiritual
its a great piece
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Congrats on the gold for this apocalyptic piece. Definitely spot on the prompt!
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Thank you for your comment on my entry in the same contest. Now, let me return the favor.
My favorite line is "overshadowed overwhelmed overlooked," because frightening sense of being hit out of nowhere. I can hear your comments on the willfully ignorant.
Good luck to you also with your entry.
Marlene
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Excellent and factual great imagery
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Excellent. Congratulations on a most worthy gold.
Well done. ~Pamela 
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excellent
well worthy of the Gold , great job
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whoa that is a mouthful 
fantastic take papa. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Delila
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So you want and honest reaction
Well here goes
An awesome write and you have depicted the prompt in a brilliant way
Wishing you luck and be happy, keep smiling
Julie
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wonderful. I really enjoyed it..just wondering...shouldn't it be ungrateful? perhaps I'm wrong But good luck!
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You did a great job on the prompt.
I like the imagery and "Wording"
A most wonderful penning indeed.
Best of wishes to you
Tony
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I'm unsure of the usage of 'totally' in the first line, but overall, rather powerful vocabulary choices in your poem. Nice take from your choice of prompt.
Best of luck!
Steve
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