Desperate... to see your face,
unsaturated by shadows.
Stalking your steps,
clutching this drowning light.
Our mated souls~unable to let go.
Author notes
Picture Credit : sin by ~DarknessWonder
A contest entry
- Short Poems' Wanted!! by BorntothePurple.
450 points, ended October 6, 183 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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excellent~
Very emotive
I too love the unsaturated shadows
Back later had chemo today not doing so hot
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~ -
Lovely I love the unsaturated by shadows , beautiful!
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I love how you embraced the desperation here..well done!!
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its like you don't know someone until you see the face as if you wont' recognize them by their mind.
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"unsaturated by shadows"
An inexplicably wonderful piece [or is it peice? do you care? lol]
never♥
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Just beautiful,
the metaphor and the image is vivid,
i love this picture!
God bles
Slán
Dolores x
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Succinct and succulent. Excellent short piece. I love the line "unsaturated by shadows" -- so provocative. Great word choice as well. Lovely. Simply lovely.
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Now i realy liket that one. But i always like your work.
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A beautiful poem of longing. What a way to capture it. You have a way with brevity.
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wow
this brought so much to my mind... this piece is absolutely brilliant!! great work and keep on penning -
Awesome!!!
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beautiful poem!
unsaturated by shadows...love the play and feel of these words...it is often hard to let go of a mated soul..
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ya! ~Trisha~
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oops again
Please forgive me
I have a terrible migraine
I am sorry I made such a boo boo
Hope all is forgiven...but I did read it
I can see why it's a fav of yours I love it
Hugs
Your sis
The boo boo maker
Susan~~~
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oops
I didn't realize it was a poem
I thought it was for a contest...
Silly me this should be in one tho
It would be a winner
Hugs
Susan~~~
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excellent~
Whoa
What images this evoked in my mind
I think we are on the same wave lenght
My newest one is on the manner of this one...
Enjoyed this immensely...
Hope you pop over and read mine as well
I promise to soon catch up on all yours
I haven't been feeling good at all
Best of luck in this contest
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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Wonderful~
Desperate
to see your face,
unsaturated by shadows.
Most powerful part for me.
I throughly enjoyed reading this!
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This is such an incredible take on the image prompt!!! So very well spoken; a longing, gentle yet holding tight to the intesity of emotions! Great write!!!
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revision
Hello there.
Congratulations on your award. But even more congratulations on revising your poem. I always like to see that in a poet.
Have a wondrous day,
BJ. -
a good dark image packed piece of poetry - shadows obscure features in a black and white moment that's captured.
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I Like it.
Can you ever see our faces without shadows? We really don't know who we are really, just who we think we are. Great write.
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Congrats on the win, and ohhhh, how I like this piece
This middle stanza is superb. Love, lane
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Wow!!
Another Wonderful weaving of words and Powerful images~
The message grabs and Gosh my eyes started to swell
The words: 'drowning light' just tugged at the Heartstrings
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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"unsaturated by shadows" incredible description... this is wonderful - great imagery and metaphor that is multi-faceted!
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Great take on the prompt!
Congrats on the bronze!
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Oh My God
Excellent write Delila (My Little Mermaid)
. You have written another fine piece of poetry. A true work of art. You make PaPa proud. Congratulations Granddaughter.
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So pleased to see a trophy on this piece. Well done beauty. Congratulations! ~Pamela
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Oh yes...
I really like this take on the prompt.
Splendid imagery and wording for sure
You did a wonderful job hunny
Best of wishes to you
Tony
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Wonderful
Very well done. Great take on the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
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ooooh. I have been checking and checking and checking. SO WORTH the wait. Well done my friend. Best of luck. I LOVED IT. ~Pamela
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