Mile after mile
you shave years off my body.
Gone are the years of pestilence and drought
now floating on blue mountains
in mists of nostalgia.
At night the silence of your embrace
pulls me back from the edge
to a nothingness of eternity and day's
where the sky calmly waits
I'm happy.
Roads stretch into golden sunsets
to an ending that never quite ends.
I could be here until the ocean swallows the shore
and erase footprints left by shadows.
We're driving on the clouds silver lining
to our pot of gold at the end of a burning rainbow.
There's a hand in mine
when I touch the top of a tree
and swim where there's a love affair
between heaven and water
the horizon an oasis
of blue fading into blue
In forgotten castles I found my hope
my home...
There's a hand in mine
when I sleep
dreaming of a dream
inside a dream
Author notes
I've just returned from a road trip and wrote this poem on the road. so technically this is a pre written poem.
A contest entry
- Silver Lining by Glasyalabolas.
700 points, ended March 24, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I have to agree with other comments on this piece and say there is a great depth of warmth and hapiness in this piece, it gives strong emotions of contentment just reading it. Lovely thoughts and imagery.
Something I don't often mention on any pieces, the colours used in the text and background fit absolutely perfectly with this write.
Good write and congrats on bronze.
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Briliant
Dis amazing, Wow, ek dink nog een van die bestes wat ek al gelees het. Jy klink so gelukkig, ek is so bly vir jou. Die manier wat jy alles so intiem beskryf slaan my asem weg. Ek kry sommer butterflies as dit lees, dit gryp my siel so aan en gee my moed om aan te gaan met hierdie ding wat ons almal liefde noem. Dis n briljantre gedig, baie geluk.
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This is beautiful!
It is so difficlut to explain how I felt when reading it... elated I think is a good word.
There's a light joy to this, it makes me think of sun kissed sand and clear skies and just... pure bliss.
I loved the imagery in this.
Road trips are wonderful under the right circumstances, no?
Amazing job.
Nice to read something new from you.
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It's the first time it has been posted though, so I wont treat it as a pre-write. Many thanks.
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This is beautiful.
So adventurous, its like traveling through all the exotic places that you could fall in love.
"to an ending that never quite ends.
I could be here until the ocean swallows the shore"
Those 2 lines were my favoriteeee omg I read them over and over. This poem is so close to being one of my favorites. The parts that are beautiful are just flawless, so colorful, free and warm.
I like this because it is so just free and content. its not overly in my face anything its just smiling and reaching out & I love that.
"There's a hand in mine
when I touch the top of a tree
and swim where there's a love affair"
That was so gorgeous, my second favorite bit. its just like, someone is here someone is my friend its so lovely and then just climbing upwards I can just feel the rainforest and the trees and the canopy and then leaping out like tarzan people into blue blue water. So refreshing and perfect!
Absolutely blissful write you have here, amazing<3.
xoxo♥
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