Did she have to spell it out for him?
When the days got longer
The talks between them
Got shorter
And all seemed somewhat lost
In an abyss
She thought to herself
Where did it all go?
Was this all her fault
Or did she just make a wrong turn down the road?
Had she broken the enslaving
Bond of silence
She could have seen it for all it really was
But she only sat alone
Trapped in her papers
And shoes
And the situation for what it was
A complete lack of concentration
A contest entry
- Underneath it all... (are you my muse?) by DefinitiveFreak.
525 points, ended March 18, 2008, 12 entries
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wow .nice
This is a lovely and sweet little tear jerker.
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Ummmm..... I am not really sure I get it. It starts out like it is talking about a girl in or trying to get in a relationship with someone but it is fading til its gone but I don't really understand the end. >_< Sorry.
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Nice
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Hmm I like this is a good write..makes you think a bit. Loved the last 5 lines. Xds-gX
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very good Jamie likes
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I like it.
Punctuation could use a bit of work. Great imagery and description!
-Serana -
I really like this!
She thought to herself
Where did it all go?
Was this all her fault
Or did she just make a wrong turn down the road?
I have to say THIS is my favorite part. Great poem.
Megan
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