Pain- a slow suicide
Weakness- on display
For the world to see
Broken-a lifeless heart
Death- losing yourself
Life- breathing it in
Truth- loving him
Love- overpowers
The darkness
Author notes
It's my first free write and I like it I hope you do!
Tell me the truth but be kind
Comments
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Oh this was soo sweet. I really liked this piece.. I really enjoyed it.. So short but the words make it a strong piece. I loved it..
Peace to you, jetleena
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I call this a candlelight poem
because the beauty and strength in it...shines bright
through out the poem despite the despair too.
For what power has dark when a single candlelight exposes
all...you wrote a lovely free write, I could of drank
in more of this poem! and I do so agree...what strikes
the light to expose the dark? even if we don't have the
courage of heart...typically and most usually...LOVE!
loved your freewrite, great job, can't wait to read
more!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) BRAVO! BRAVO!
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Hello, what a nice ending. Its almost like the poem spiked at this moment. like HELLO LOOK AT ME! .
Love this.
"Truth- loving him
Love- overpowers
The darkness"
Love does over come/overpowers darkness. And I must agree with you, love, an intense and sincere love is all the "truth" anyone ever needs.
Love Poet
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Over reading your poem I think that it's all true and it was really good.
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