My Family Moves Into The Barn
My Mum was feeding us one night in the barn
You all listen now while I tell you this yarn.
Farmer Jones he came in and started to yell
All of us mice’s scattered and nearly fell
Mum was still feeding my siblings you see
I was the strongest so it was up to me
‘Listen here Farmer Jones we mean you no harm
You must let us stay here on your farm
My Dad he was eaten by the big black cat
Our Mum is so sad, now what about that?’
‘Very sorry to hear about that young man
Ever need any help I’ll do what I can
Stay here in the barn as long as you like.’
I thanked the farmer, said ‘My name is Mike
Nice to meet you, please keep that cat away’
‘Try as much as I can’ he lives yonder by the hay
‘Our cat won't bother you I guarantee that.’
Today we all live happily except for that cat
How we laugh as the Farmer spins a yarn
Each one of my siblings they listen inside the barn
But that big old black cat he just sits in the yard
Always glaring right back at me real hard
Reckons the Farmer hates him and now likes me
Now ain’t that a doggone shame I giggle with glee.
Jenelda White March 8, 2008
Author notes
HMMMMM Just felt like writing a silly one.
In a list
A contest entry
- HUGUENAUTIES CONTEST # 30 FOR HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by huguenauties.
750 points, ended March 24, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Boo Hiss
Phew! What a lousy, sorry poem!
Can't you do any better than this?
Knock, knock on head -- nobody home.
Shame, shame, shame on you -- Boo Hiss.
Tiki Cat
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Jen, what a gem!
You have a sparkling imagination
that lights up this tale, which
is witty and attention holding,
wanting to be read aloud.
Great!!!
M-C
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Dear Jenelda,
Well! If this isn't the darndest acrostic I've read!!!
I'm really upset to read that the cat ate Mike's Dad.
Fluffy has NEVER hurt mice or birds and Tommo, the other cat who frequents our property, hides in my fernery and, when the birds fly down to snatch the bread we throw on the lawn, rushes out at them but only scares them away. They are much too quick for him and he's never caught one yet. We don't see many mice around here anyway.
Applause for your acrostic story and best of luck in the votiong.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)
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Dear Jen, This is a really delightful poem that I enjoyed reading very much.Are you going to write more about Mike and the cat?
Love Hine.
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Dear Jen,
This is a cute poem about Mike and his family, I remember you once told me about a pet mouse called Mike. I love the picture.
Thank you for entering our first monthly contest.
Good luck in the voting.
Love AJ
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Sorry about your Daddy but cats gotta eat, too, ya know.
But I'm glad you're all safe and sound and I guess the cat's gonna have to settle for that nice warm milk fresh from the cow.
this is a really cute poem, Jen and I wish you good luck in the contest
Dee
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The first impression of this acrostic is very cute, the mouse is sweet. This is an unusual point of view, and it makes the poem even cuter.
I'm glad you had fun writing, because this was fun reading too!
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Dear Jen,
I enjoyed your story about the mice and the cat. I used to like watching "Tom & Jerry" cartoons (but now I'm over that).
It was a cute story and I wish I had a child to read it to. I have two cats and they're so well fed, they only play with the occasional mouse that wanders in our house. (I'm keeping my fingers crossed..that hasn't happened for a long time!)
Best of Luck in the contest!
Love,
Maureen
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Reminds me in some odd way of an old Mary Wilkins Freeman story about a mother moving her family into the barn, well the title does anyway.
What a nice farmer...not many the would let a mouse stay in his barn...I don't think I would...then again I'm mean.
Poor cat, he just wants to do his job...I hope the cows stomp on the mean old farmer.
This was fun.
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This acrostic was a light-hearted tale to read, obviously fun also to write. Full of metaphors--the mice and cat are "personifications" acting like people--and who are we to say they cannot, just because we do not understand them? That makes Farmer Jones pretty smart!
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