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Splattering drops spray against
a blank parchment;
searching for any truth,
as my frayed quill thirsts to create
essence from distorted hopes

"make believe" survives only in ink;
colored in rose petals
with jasmine scent,
scrolling across pallid
sheets of tightly woven fibers

I find myself weaved into thoughts
of emptiness
with lonely shadows echoing
ear to ear;
battling heart and mind

confusion conquers all quests,
shredding visions of dreams into
what reality keeps
locked and keyed

anguish sets in,
pouring out in black stains
of circumstance,
dripping with streaks of intent

 

 

so I toss it aside
once more,

with yesterdays

overused words


gripping my pen...

I bury heart’s sorrow
in silence

between the lines~






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  • azure85 gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    "make believe" survives only in ink;
    colored in rose petals
    with jasmine scent,
    scrolling across pallid
    sheets of tightly woven fibers

    Oh, what a gorgeous poem, full of feeling. vEverything the poet experiences, written there between the lines you have composed, congrats on the gold!


  • maa gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    heartfelt congratulations on your absolute masterpiece of beauty, grace and poetic genius ! I am so proud of you ...

    much love,

    marion


    • jasminerose
      March 26, 2008

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      Thank you Marian for your beautiful words and good cheer!! It means a great deal to me!!
      Thank you so very much!
      Linda


  • Harrisham Minhas gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    Hey Linda!

    This poem is- Wow!
    You have made an amazing usage of vocabulary and poetic devices to create this vivid and heartfelt write.
    The way you have "weaved" this poem is wonderful.

    Thanks for your entry.

    Harrisham Minhas

  • InBetweenThoughts
    March 11, 2008

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    Spoken simply and taken in like that of a sponge without interrupt to decipher the ease of that in which you meant for all to perceive in a gentle stroking of your quill. Sad, but wonderful...best wishes my love..xoxox Ken IBT


  • Yazhi
    March 10, 2008

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    Wow Linda, this is just wow! Plain and simple it is not. It says so much to me with deep emotions making me relate to all you have written. Hidding behind the lines are even deeper sorrows. This is an awesome poem. Wow.


  • Fug-azi
    March 10, 2008
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    can do nothing more than applaud this outstanding write


  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    oh my sweet dear lady....I think you brought to life in words the feelings,the thoughts, the human condition of so many people. You felt them and somehow you were guided by your pen to touch others and say yes" she has got it right". I do like that somehow I see hope though in the lines..."I bury heart's sorrow in silence". Not that I believe that sorrow should be buried, but maybe after it has been experienced and dealt with-------unless we do something with it , how could we ever reach for our dreams...so maybe if we bury them deep enough , they will not re-surface??
    sending you much love and many smiles
    xoxoxoxoxoxo
    reenie


  • Meme Wheeler
    March 8, 2008

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    Oh wow. I am totally blown away with this piece. The eloquent way in which you wrote this supported my emotions as I read through the underlying sadness here. My favorite part of this poem...


    "so I toss it aside
    once more,
    with yesterdays
    overused words

    gripping my pen...

    I bury heart’s sorrow
    in silence

    between the lines~"


    BEYOND AWESOME!


  • looneyeclipse
    March 8, 2008

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    At first, when reading the opening lines or two, I thought I was at some CSI crime scene investigation lol...ya know, with the drops and splatter and fun stuff like that lol, j/k Jasmine.

    No need for luminol testing, or the like in this situation. My investigation concludes that one would need to imagine in detail what would make one happy, and not to let go of that vision, until it traspires. Okay, class dismissed. Please read chapter 9 for Monday, and be ready to answer questions correctly.

    btw, beautiful poetry


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    March 8, 2008

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    Excellent

    A sad write, many times the quill will lead us to writting the same words over and over in search for dreams of coloured happiness. always remember tomorrow is another day and could bring such coloured dreams to light so live for today with a heart of hope that brings light to the heart enabling dreams to flurish. best wishes Jazz HM

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