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Beauty beyond has no compare
from the shades of nature.
Carpet's  soft with artful turfs
blooming from  grains of greens.
Copper red leafs lying still

on the quiet pasture hill.
Beneath the feet of the passerby.
Sunlight golden to catch there eye.
In the shade of the waiting tree
we sit a while to think of thee.

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photo credit: Frank W. Houck
pif nature promt 10 poets 10lines

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  • tony yates silver member
    March 16, 2008
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    superb

    very well written, i liked 'copper red' well done/thanks


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Congrats on the silver!

    This is wonderful, superb flow and rhyme. congrats on the silver. All the best in the contest with it


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    Lovely interpretation of the picture prompt served to inspire writers for this contest. Liked the rhythm, rhyme and flow in these lines - silver winner to boot.

  • piccola silver member
    March 12, 2008

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    this is beautiful but again you have an apostrophy where none is needed. (turf's) You might want to do some research on apostrophy and see how they are used. It is a bit confusing. Also I think it's passers by .. since the word pass is the root word. I feel like I'm picking on you but then when I go further, I find catch's instead of catches and shade's instead of shade ... Congrats on the silver though.


  • animated lies
    March 12, 2008
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    Congratulations on the silver trophy. Edits that could be made include... Changing "feet of paser's by" to "feet of passersby" and taking out the S on "catch's" Overall you had really lovely imagery. Sorry if my grammar issues become an annoyance. Thank you for sharing this with the group.

    animated


  • Hetha gold member
    March 12, 2008
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    Nicely done by the Silver trophy you won! Well worth the read. Thanks for sharing it.


  • Roaddog Wolf
    March 8, 2008

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    very nicely penned write good flow, imagery and meaning, good write Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    March 8, 2008
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    Aww hun
    This really has opened my eyes and I can visualise this scene.
    "Carpet's  soft with artful turf's
    blooming from grains of greens."
    Those lines are wonderful, as if you can scent the freshness of newly mowed lawn.
    Hugs Julie xx
    x

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