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Let You Down

It's harder than you imagine
So what can I do it make it right?
This is a world of shadows and despair
If I let you down
If I let you down tonight

So how do I explain it to you?
Will a paper trail of broken parts
Make it clearer in your eyes
If I let you down
If I let you down and break your heart

And believe me that's what I'll do
I will let you down
So watch your back
I will let you down
And you won't thank me for that

So watch me go in my act
I'll dazzle you with harlequin smiles
And razor cuts to ease your pain
I'll let you down
I'll let you down all over again

Stay high above me
Stay high above me
Stay high above me

I'll let you down
Just see if I don't

It's harder than you imagine
So what can I do it make it right?
This is a world of shadows and despair
If I let you down
If I let you down tonight

So how do I explain it to you?
Will a paper trail of broken parts
Make it clearer in your eyes
If I let you down
If I let you down and break your heart


Author notes

~Pain~

A contest entry

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  • lovlilmystery
    November 5

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    Nicely, well written song. Love all of it and can picture this very easily. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.

    Sandi


  • x-evil cupid-x
    June 9

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    well done, I'm flabergasted, not forced rhyme, good syllables, thank you for entering


    kimie


  • Heva Feva
    June 5
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    Beautiful structure and rhyme! Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva


  • in silver script
    April 20

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    Wow, this is really good. The way you repeated certain lines really added to the overall effect of the piece...great job with this! Thanks for following the rules and thanks for entering!


  • InsanityisAmusing
    April 3

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    I love how you repeated some of your sentences, it really makes the meaning loud and clear, great job. Thanks for entering and goo luck.


  • ModernDionysis
    March 3
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    Wise, honest, brutal in some ways but sincere. Really good.


  • sanguigno
    February 3
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    LOVE IT


  • willowwisp
    December 18, 2008

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    thanks so much for entering!

    Best wishes now and always!
    Write on!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 3, 2008

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    Awww what a sad song...and it's one I can relate to all too well, my imperfections perfect me here.


  • Captain Jenny
    October 23, 2008
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    Excellent. Thanks for entering


  • fairytalelovestory
    October 14, 2008
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    ty for entering good luck


  • GypsyEyes
    September 16, 2008

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    i love the repeated lines in this stanzas! great job! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • DarknessOfSanity
    July 2, 2008

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    Were these supposed to be lyrics?

    They were really good! I absolutely loved them, they had a nice flow, and I think it would sound great with music! Thanks for entering -good luck!


  • SoftlyScreaming
    June 21, 2008

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    ive been looking for something along these lines... it gives me inspiration and makes me think of what type of rhyme scheme i can go by.. it makes me see that people have a choice.. this is a beautiful piece, good luck and thanks for entering.

  • Fitz1901
    June 15, 2008

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    Awesome right.

    It flows so smoothly full of powerful emotion. I loved it.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Wilted Rose Bush
    April 4, 2008

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    great write

    clearly full of emotion and a great structure

    looks like a song too

    well done, an emotional and powerful write

    well done, good luck and thanks for entering


  • xFallenFairyx
    March 21, 2008

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    0.0 okay wow totaly blown away this is a GREAT poem an awsome write. So much feeling and Man Its just good.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 15, 2008
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    Thanks for entering my contest with your emotionally felt piece much love, Raneika

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