Holding you in my arms tonight,
With devil and angel wings we take flight,
Over land and sea we go,
To a place no one else knows
With no one around for miles,
We stare at each other's smiles,
Under the moonlight and the stars
We feel each other's hearts
Together watching the morning sunrise,
The devil & angel say their goodbyes,
Taking his angel by the hand,
The devil flies back across the land
Although at times we say goodbye,
Our love will never die,
By the light of the night's new moon,
We will be together again soon
I can feel you in my soul,
You're the piece that makes me whole,
You are always in my heart,
So we are never far apart
Author notes
This be Option 4. It's something different. It's something for Bek too. KASSY IS A FREAK!
A contest entry
- Are you up for it? Are YOU good enough? Give it a shot! OPTIONS! by Kassandra Nyktos.
600 points, ended March 16, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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We all can be a little bit of everything, without one we cannot be the other. Nicely put hun, good luck in contest.
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brava brava keep it up it was soooooooooooooooo good loved it
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Love it!
~*~AWESOME~*~ I loved it very much! A great write indeed! Planning on reading more of your work very soon! Hope that they are as indescribably awesome as this one was! Again, aweome, awesome write. Made me think quite a bit! Check out my poems and such if you want to! I love leaving comments and then getting some back! (It's like feedback on ebay.....lol) Thanks for sharing!
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This is great!
Really evoked a brilliant image in my mind. You used a brilliant, eloquent vocabulary and an intoxicating subject to pull this together, and I'm glad you did. It's amazing. There's not much more words for it. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful poem with us.
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I liked this. It's a beautiful concept. Forbbidden love with a twist. I think you're a very talented writer, and did a great job with this. Keep writing! =)
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Please forgive me but to me it seems unfinished. That is just the feeling I got when I finished reading it.
And you use the same rythym techinique the whole time. The first and second line always ryhme and the 3rd and 4th always rhyme.
But it does give the poem a sense of togetherness.
Just my thoughts,
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Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful! I love your writing. Great word choice, and description. I love the moonlight part it put a picture in my head. Great Job!
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Good poem.
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good
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awesome poem! I think it's neat how you have the devil and angel in love, two things people would never really put together. It's creative and I love it! I think my favorite stanza would have to be the last one:
"I can feel you in my soul,
You're the piece that makes me whole,
You are always in my heart,
So we are never far apart"
nice write, thanks for sharing!
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amazing
poem......i loved the piece.....good luck in the contest
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"Although at times we say goodbye,
Our love will never die,
By the light of the night's new moon,
We will be together again soon"
Wow this is truly beautiful and unique. Written in a fantasey form yet it takes on more of a real feel. I dont know if u wrote this for someone but if you did your feelings couldnt have been expressed more clearly then in the last to stanza, great write I enjoyed it very much
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Love brings about a unique transformation in our personalities. You have experienced that amazing transformation in you. That is why your soul and heart have made you so strong,
"I can feel you in my soul'
You're the piece that makes me whole,
You are always in my heart,
So we are never far apart"
The musicality of these lines is the outcome of the spiritual experience that you have been undergoing.
Rahi
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Gorgeous
Holding you in my arms tonight,
With devil and angel wings we take flight
Over land and sea we go,
To a place no one else knows....
This opening stanza had me hooked. You Have a wonderful way of expression and imagery.
I can feel you in my soul,
You're the piece that makes me whole,
You are always in my heart,
So we are never far apart
The last stanza/verse ties the whole piece together with a red velvet bow. BRAVO ~mandie~
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i really like this poem, also, the background goes nice to tie in with the devil and angel, the heart fire and ice.
very descriptive, and shows that even if people are different they still get along and can love each other. good job!
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a good poem, i like that the devil and angel wings are present here for we all have both good and bad in us. and here you show that good can be liked by the darker shades and that the dark can be liked by good.
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love can be portrayed in different ways but it will always have the same meaning... no matter how differently you describe it.
I seem to like the title... it brings out the rest of the poem into a different view. . . I would have never thought this could be about love.
A very good write...
Chrysalis
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I can see the tender flow and the content of the love describing the scenario of the heart of the lover..an impressive work indeed....
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Hm.
Love with a Twist.
Kinda like Roemo && Juliet
In a Mythology sense.
Creative!
Adding this to my list of poet Favorites.
Cause I can.
So there.
Neener Neener Neener.
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wow...I really like this good job Mal!
bet the gf would love it too
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