I saw you in a dream of miseries past,
I can tell you're dangerous and if I fall
I will never come back,
I see you holding the night
In pale outstretched hands,
It feels so cold...behold
I am not afraid of death,
To walk beside you I will crossover
Whatever path you take,
I will make my way in my sorrow and seduction
My salty tears the bait,
I feel something is coming for me soon
Sweet release
With bated breath I wait ;
It was just a flicker in the corner of my eyes,
Surrounded by the lost
Something moved
It was alive,
I can hear it breathing
Like a whispered shadow's breath,
So I moved through the crowd to the sound
It sounds like death,
It touched me like a savior calling me home,
Cut me like a razor
Stripped my soul to the bone,
With eyes that warmed my soul
I see my heaven in his face,
A radiant light in his heart
Like the righteous hand of fate ;
There was fire in his eyes
It should have frightened
I should run,
With that beautiful smile I could tell
He could break me with love,
Please do not touch me
Do not come another step near,
I would fall to my knees
If you do not turn around and leave me frozen here,
Do not speak my name like a lover
It is like music to my ears,
Do not wrap me in those wings
A sheltering solace from my fear,
Because I know
I have always known
Within your embrace
I would disappear ;
He’s got sugar on his lips
Do not resist what you can't,
He's got candy for the baby in you
Just come take his hand,
Soft kisses to your soul
A deadly temptation,
He looks deep into your eyes
Hypnotized
It begins,
He sinks his sweet teeth in ;
Feel the beat of his heart
Like a drum in your head,
As the darkness consumes you
Reborn into a night of reverence,
So warm is the taste of him
It flows across your lips,
It tasted like sugar
And things left unsaid,
It is the only thing you will ever need now
A hunger for love bleeding crimson red,
Taste my submission
On the lust I have fed,
Nothing left but the sweet relief of promises met
With his affection
And this sugar I have bled :
Author notes
About a Vampire and his prey. Which is Which?
The Rythum to this piece is Industrial Goth-Techno (written to various riffs and melodies of the band "Curve" and for it's lead singer Toni Halliday)
A contest entry
- Are you up for it? Are YOU good enough? Give it a shot! OPTIONS! by Kassandra Nyktos.
600 points, ended March 16, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark (again) loss by Selene Tremere.
400 points, ended March 31, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark Passions by DrkPoet.
450 points, ended April 8, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lyrics by BittersweetPhantasm.
650 points, ended April 19, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - my vampire love by hardwire.
300 points, ended June 25, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Great poem but its dosnt have the Vampire test im looking for
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This was amazingly penned, dark and brooding with wonderful imagery and a path winding into temptation. Thanks for entering it!
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wow, some of these lyrics are absolutely wonderful! this is the kind of thing i was looking for with my contest
i think my favourite parts are:
So I moved through the crowd to the sound
It sounds like death,
It touched me like a savior calling me home,
Cut me like a razor
Stripped my soul to the bone,
With eyes that warmed my soul
I see my heaven in his face,
A radiant light in his heart
Like the righteous hand of fate ;
Do not speak my name like a lover
It is like music to my ears,
Do not wrap me in those wings
A sheltering solace from my fear,
Because I know
I have always known
Within your embrace
I would disappear ;
thank you and good luck -
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Thanks so much, it was a fun write. I'm always thrilled when someone finds some value in the work.
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Wonderful write. Congratulations...Well deserved Bronze!
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I loved this! wonderfully written amazing!
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Wow!
I absolutely love how this is written. Love the wording, love how it flows, love where the rhyming is placed, love the emotions, just absolutely love how you did this.
I think this is my favorite part of the poem:
There was fire in his eyes...
It should have frightened...
I should run,
With that beautiful smile I could tell...
He could break me with love,
Please do not touch me...
Do not come another step near,
I would fall to my knees...
If you do not turn around and leave me frozen here,
Do not speak my name like a lover...
It is like music to my ears,
Do not wrap me in those wings...
A sheltering solace from my fear,
Because I know...
I have always known...
Within your embrace...
I would disappear ;
This poem was like reading a section of a book I just couldn't put down. Wonderfully done! Good luck in the contest.
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Too kind, thanks much, I always feel elated when someone finds something of worth in a piece. It's so nice to know it touched someone in some way.
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I love vampirism... it's like my own fetish/erotica. I like this one a lot. It's lovely and sensual but not like 'Eww I'm going to throw up because it's so nasty'. Perfect imagery.
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O.o Seriously...you just fed my addiction here...and for that, I'm majorly happy. Lovely morbid write, and I'm gonna have to read it at least a few more times before I know how this ranks up
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