Your love wraps
around me
keeps me
covered in the night.
Your words
smother me in kisses.
keep me dreaming
moonlit wishes.
Memories
cling to me
and I cling to memories.
Cuddle up in firelight
and think of you.
Curl up in starlight
and dream about you.
Darkness
feels so soft
now that you are gone.
Author notes
Option one:why does darkness feel so soft? shortyjo
A contest entry
- Quote-inspired (words on the fridge) by Ja Vorbesc.
700 points, ended April 6, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great Job
This is a brilliant poem. you have incorporated some really great images. Especially: ' Your words
smother me in kisses. ' and the last stanza. Great job
SX
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I really liked this, It was full with lovely words to express love. I really liked the use of the firelight and starlight but I think my favourite part was the lines "Memories cling to me and I cling to memories" I think that really captures the feelings after you have lost someone you love, where you hang on to the past and also the way it stays with you even if you did want shake it. This was a nice piece, although to me the ending with darkness seeming soft goes against the feelings i have had previously so i find the last part hard to connect with but it was lovely all the same. Well done!
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Touched
Well Done x
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Loving
Soft images of love, and yet lover is not there? I like the firelight/starlight, in fact I like it all!
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This is original! I definitely hadn't thought about the quote in that way. I like it.
Picky me, of course, just has to say, (using my weight as the person with the shiny trophies) maybe capitalizing your title properly may be an idea to consider. Don't know if it's a typo or just doesn't make a difference to you, which is also just fine, but I'm more likely to read it if it looks grammatically correct. 'In the Night'
Bravo!
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