The other side of the mountain,
where the sun shines everyday.
Lost love past and tears of pain,
blue skies washes them all away.
Mountain steep with jagged cliffs,
break free from the dark side's hold.
Upwards as faith and hope uplifts,
glimpse joy and happiness untold.
Within my grasp the sun's warm rays,
my tears of sorrow will soon fade.
Nearing the top lost in misty haze,
leave behind broken promises made.
The mountain tall beckons and calls,
as it trembles beneath my feet.
I must scale these high creviced walls,
and stare in the eye of defeat.
See the green valley and far beyond,
I have never come this far before.
God gave me strength to carry on,
the sun shines for me once more.
In a list
A contest entry
- BODY, MIND AND SOUL! by LadyLavender.
575 points, ended March 14, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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glowing with spiritual enlightnment. Thanks for this journey...beautiful write.
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OH I truly enjoyed this..Seem to be climbing that scally side of the mountain myself. And as I make small but for going steps to the top as I climb I to will enjoy when I look and see that green valley below. Great Flow and fantastic thoughts expressed here easily for all to relate to as we move on. Hope all is going well for you. You are in my prayers.
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What a powerful work. Moving from a faded relationship to become independent in the grace of God, moving forward with life to stare defeat in the eye. Lovely last stanza, power is shared to gather strength in the sun.
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great write. wonderful rhythm and rhyme. fantastic imagery. thank you for sharing this. you are a superb writer! i always enjoy reading your words. keep writing! God bless you always
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There is always shine there for us
We often have to earn them amd look for them....mac
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TRULY UPLIFTING !!!!
Even when there seems to be only darkness there is always light on the other side. Keep faith alive and the light will come.
Your title brings to my mind a true life movie about olympic hopeful Jill Kinmont, the title of the movie and book was THE OTHER SIDE OF THE MOUNTAIN, her true story.
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i love the beautiful imagery you have filed this piece with and the life in it gripped me as i read. its amazing gammy well done
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good thots
I like the poem, altho it lacks flow. I'm not sure what the style is, but...
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Wow! This poem was filled with amazing imagery. You used very descriptive words and brought the poem to life. Great job!
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Masterpiece
I so much love all your writes hun.
Your writes are simply brilliant
The flow and rhyme is flawless as always
"The mountain tall beckons and calls,
as it trembles beneath my feet.
I must scale these high creviced walls,
and stare in the eye of defeat.
See the green valley and far beyond,
I have never come this far before.
God gave me strength to carry on,
the sun shines for me once more."
BEAUTIFUL
WELL PENNED!
Wish you the best in the contest
Much Love,
~David~
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I love this. the imagery is so perfectly carried out, you did a great job on this one.. love this : "Within my grasp the sun's warm rays,
my tears of sorrow will soon fade.
Nearing the top lost in misty haze,
leave behind broken promises made."
thank you for sharing. -eleno
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wow! what a beautiful piece with such vivid scenery! it's sooooo good!! i love it!
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Such a warm uplifiting piece. Such a call for hope with the beauty of the sun shine. There is such a depth in your words that always amazes me. You display such a beautiful soul.
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Beautiful write here
OH how beautiful the mountains truly are this is a great write
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Beautiful.
This piece sounds just like it was written by you and indeed it was. I wonder how you are doing these days, especially after your loss. You continue to write so well. -
excellent
It is very well written and holds hope, faith and encouraging words for others. It is emotional and inspiring. A good read when life gets us down. Darlee77
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wow grammy
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Thank you so much Em. Bless you. Hugs and Smiles, Grammy
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