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Winter's Last HeartBroken Snowman.

And in this moment,
your breath shall shatter
in the winter sky,
collectng smoke and
disappear...
along with me.

Melt with the sun
that shown upon your
eyes of green.
Stick hands lay upon
ground frozen solid
trapping the memories.
laughter echoes upon
hills of white...
fading to green...

your scarf blown
gently and softly...
strangling and masking
your insecurity...
such a full figured man.
who could love thee?


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odd I know...but so awesome.

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  • Taka Shira
    October 7

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    i love ths sonic of the poem..the silent wind you could hear in your mind while reading it. the imagery is vivd and keeps your mind wanting to picture more....it is gentle


  • Spooky Mind
    July 30
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    O.O

    Ive never felt bad for a snow man before....good job.

  • Juno101
    July 28
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    i love the title, its interesting. i enjoyed this, good job.


  • Sharon Marie gold member
    June 1
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    I Think it's terribly sweet

    I loved it what a cute sense of humor
    Nice write and ryme


  • Pursed Poker Lips
    April 2

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    I love, LOVE the last stanza--great imagery and diction, it's sad in a way but very beautiful.
    Loved it.
    Rachelle


  • Stardajah
    March 3
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    OMG that was so good i love it


  • aboomer silver member
    January 25
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    Love the depth in this - great wording, images and emotion.
    Nicely done!


  • TheBobbis
    January 20
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    good use of elipses and nice flow. i enjoy the poem and my personal interpretation of it.


  • Peanut Butter.
    November 6, 2008

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    This is cute, Eggeh. It's sad, but emotional, I lvoe it. Gonna' read up on some more, yo'!


  • condor gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    This is a very good poem with an open meaning that anyone can see answers for themselves. You used your words well and paced the piece well. Rhyme and flow were excellent. Well done indeed.


  • Dmonik
    October 19, 2008

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    I like this
    It tells a sad and forlorn story, but isn't too depressing... It's actually quite macabre and sinistre in a sense. Wonderfully written, Holly.
    Bravo

    'D'


  • Painwarlock
    October 12, 2008

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    ok this was very good it had alot of thought put into the words and the way they put out applause for yous


  • Demmy-Defect
    September 25, 2008
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    awwww. o.o
    i wish the hug the snowman now...


  • SidSlyde
    August 26, 2008

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    Hahaha, the last two lines make me think of Frosty the Snowman being obese. Makes me long for winter and snow now. I'm hooked on your writings.


  • VampyreGod
    March 12, 2008
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    this is wicked kewl

    neat poem, teh eggeh... pretty, pretty kewl ^_^


  • ScArLeM
    March 7, 2008
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    you did an amazing job on this

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