Take me away from this land of strife,
Ferry me across the rivers of life,
Gliding thourgh the ethereal mist,
Traveling from a world that will not be missed
The sound of screams echo over the still sea,
I shiver as the sounds of the dead surround me,
I think of all those I left behind,
As guilt slowly immerses my mind,
I am headed to Avalon's golden shores,
and I will be happier than ever before,
But before I arrive I must abandon my friends,
And suffer shame and regret to no end.
Author notes
Avalon was my title (duh) haha, and this is my second entry(the other one is my angel). Hope you enjoyed it.
A contest entry
- Heaps of Options!! by NooNiThEWitcH.
430 points, ended June 8, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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mmmm.. interesting!
I never thought about any down sided or consequences of going to Avalon.. and therefore exceeding my expectations earns you a well done!
I really like your word choice and that your rhyme is not forced. The length of the poem is short *love that*
and I like how you mix happiness with sorrow, leaving and longing for those you are leaving behind.
It is sad, because the end of the poem suggests an eternity of suffering in a land that's supposed to be the best of all.
I really like this poem.
Please IM ME with the titles of both your poems or put in BOTH author's notes the titles of your poems.
Keep on writing, and hope you enter a third time.. though keep checking coz I might add more titles.
Nooni
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